Perfection ~ The Not So Perfect Story

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by ashleemac14, Oct 9, 2012.

  1. boom!
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    The twin doggies r dead
     
  2. 
     
  3. Bump Bump!
     
  4. So thanks to Lai for finding my story. I'm gonna start posting again now that I have the time. So I guess..... New Update

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    "Jonas?", I asked, still a little surprised from seeing him from my window. Why was he here? My legs walked closer to his truck, while my mind was still clueless to what was happening. It was like I had to make sure he was real, figuring it was probably another dream and I was now incredibly late for school. Leaned back against his truck , exuding uncertainty, or maybe that was me.

    "Yeah. I couldn't wait and you didn't answer any of my messages. I hope you didn't have a ride already, because I wanna take you.", he blurted out in one big jumble worded mess. It took me a while to let what he said really sink in. I was still a little angry at him for what he did, I mean yeah I wanted a kiss, but not all of the force and other stuff that came with it, at least not out in the open for all the world to see. I wanted an apology really, but I didn't want to have to tell him to apologize, he should feel the need to apologize for his awful and intrusive behavior. I stared him down, his hands in the pocket of his red hoodie and his foot against his wheel. He was relaxed and unchanging, showing his flawless outside but, the inside full of them, like a polished gem.

    "Well...", I crossed my arms. I almost forgot about Sam, how he was coming to get me. I should text him, tell him just to go to school and I'll see him there. I want to hear what Jonas has to say to me, maybe I'll get what I want from him. I pulled out my phone and began texting, paying no attention to Jonas at all.

    "Hey, I've already got a ride..... Sorry. I'll see you later", I texted Sam. I waited to see if he'd reply to me, but after fifteen minutes I decided to go with Jonas.

    I couldn't breathe, my lungs overwhelmed with the stench of body spray that just barely cloaked the boy sweat that still hung in the air. I wanted to crack a window, but I didn't want to seem rude. I'll just grin and bear it, school isn't even that far away anyway. He was staring at me, I could feel his eyes burning a hole through me as I stared out the window.

    "You're still upset...", Jonas perceived. I turned to look at him, waiting a few moments and thinking of what I would say back. I mean I wasn't really upset, just disappointed. "Look, I just want you to talk to me. I don't understand. Was it something I did?", he finished. As we pulled into the school parking lot, I couldn't keep it in any longer.

    "You don't know? You went to far Jonas, I'm nothing like that. You want that? Go talk to the school whore. Natalie's only about four cars down.", I spat at him. I quickly got out of the car and slammed the door in his face. My heart was racing, mostly because of anger and my anger towards the feelings I still had for him. I was almost to the sidewalk, when I heard feet beating on the pavement behind me. I really don't want to have yell at him.

    "Wait! Taylor, hold on.", Jonas shouted as he ran to catch up. When he stopped, he coughed from the excess cold air shooting up his nostrils and down his throat. I halfway wanted him to pass out so we couldn't talk, but I decided that was a little wrong. I felt a hand touch my shoulder, the owner breathing heavily.

    I jerked my shoulder away from him, walking on to the door I smacked him with when we met. I didn't get too much farther because Jonas grabbed my wrist, pulling me towards him. He was so close to me, my heart fluttered and my thoughts became hazy. They completely left me as our lips met, quickly turning into a burning desire for more. I realized what was happening and pushed him away, shaking my head no.
     
  5. Bump i want more of this its awesome!!! :D
     
  6. Bump. I should have another update by tomorrow.
     
  7. New Update 

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    "But I need you", Jonas told me in a soft whisper, his eyes meeting mine in a deep gaze.

    "Really? How many other girls have you told that too? Hell, just save it.", I whispered angrily at him. I just wish he'd leave me alone, I don't need anymore confusion. I still don't even know if my mind wants him as much as my heart, which was just about to beat out of my chest. I couldn't let him know that though, he needed to think we were never going to happen. Besides, I still have my feelings, if they're feelings or not, for Sam to figure out.

    "It's true...", his voice cracked. The was pain in his voice made it hurt my heart to say these things to him. He seemed a little insecure, his arm crossing his body and his hand clinging to his opposite shoulder. I had to break our gaze to keep from kissing the pain away from him, but once I start, I might not be able to stop.

    "I don't need this right now. I've got class, bye.", I lied and walked off hurriedly. Any longer and all would've been lost in that parking lot. Sam and Jen are waiting for me so, I need to get my mind off Jonas quickly.

    The chair was cold,my bare skin touching the metal bar that attached the desk to it. The music drowned out everything that was bothering me. I wanted Sam, but at the same time I wanted Jonas and maybe if I left it alone it would go away.

    Someone gripped my shoulders from behind with their touch like summer. I turned around to see that it was Sam and an instant feeling of happiness overwhelmed me as he enveloped me in his arms. I wanted to stay there forever, safe and loved in his arms. Today I had a day of all my even blocks, which meant I had Spanish 2 with Jen first. He had Theatre 2, which was all the way on the other side of the building.

    "You're gonna be late....", I spoke into his chest. The muffled noise couldn't be heard by anyone except for him. He squeezed me tighter before reluctantly letting me go. The two minute warning bell sounded, making the students run like mad men.

    "I don't care if I am," he whispered to me so bluntly, "I wanted to see if you were ok. You were kinda distressed when you walked in." I looked up at him, his eyes truly look concerned for me. I reached for his hand slowly, wanting to keep this little meeting going. Our fingertips brushed each other and I remembered this morning with my drawing.

    "I almost didn't make it this morning. That traffic was terrible.", Jen sighed loudly. I yanked my hand away quickly, stepping away from Sam. He waved to Jen and then, ran to his class and I sat back in my desk.

    My heartbeat was racing widely once again. If this day keeps up, I'll be having a heart attack by lunch.
     
  8. I should have another one by the end of the week since the last two were previously written..... Plus this next one might be rather long
     
  9. i can't wait for your Update
     
  10. Hi, that is a great plot. But I certainly expect more twists, you could go in many directions with it. It'll be amazing if you make the two guys confront but not in a corny way. Keep going hon, loved it
     
  11. 
     
  12. Ate Sweety! you're here? 
     
  13. And here I was thinking twin was my only reader haha it's unraveling as I go along haha it really whatever I feel like the week I write
     
  14.  But Ashlee you have a lot of readers!  i believe they are just lurking  come out come out people
     
  15. Just bumping to the first page so I can post the update in a few