Melancholy's Review Station

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Melancholy--_--, May 29, 2013.

  1. Hello Mel here, I've seen a lot of stories being posted or updated on here lately and I am spoiled for choice of what to read. I've also seen a lot of new and upcoming writers looking for a helpful tip or thoughts.

    So I am here to help, I may not be the most experienced reviewer but if we help each other grow and do our best then thats all that counts.

    Here at Mel's Reviews I review on several parts of a story for example: ~Originality, have i seen this plot before? ~Was I interested and involved in the story. ~Character use and development, did I get to know the characters and their personalities. ~Last but not least over all gramma, was there proper gramma, paragraphs.

    I will also try and give tips when I can from my perspective. I enjoy reading and basically any genre. I review no matter how long or short but if it is long I may not read all of it. Just so you get the review quick and easy.

    Please write the name of your story below for review and reason you would like me to review it. Also please comment on your post to bump it if needed.
     
  2. Yo, Mel.Long time, no see.
    Could you do me a favour; read and review my story: A Royal Choice. It is the sequel to a story of mine, one that you have already read: Long Live The Queen!. I hope you enjoy it!

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  3. It sure has been a long time. Sure I'm looking forward to reviewing the sequel, I'll post the review here and on your story once I am done.
     
  4. . . Heh, gramma. ;3 Grammar? xP Anyway, I'm working on a story pretty much right now and I was wondering how far through a story had to be for you to judge it?
     
  5. Yeah it was a late night XD. Grammar. The story can be at any length as long as it has a piece of writing.
     
  6. Looking good so far Mel
     
  7. Mel's Review Station


    Story: A Royal Choice


    Written by: -HS_Brooke-Noodles


    Extra Information: Sequel to
    Long Live The Queen!


    Originality~
    'Royal Wedding' is the main theme so far in the story, I have seen similar stories about that but I found yours to bring a certain unique vibe about it.

    Interest~
    For a girl not into all the royal stuff I enjoyed reading your take on it. The wedding was at a good pace, sometimes the delivery of the detail was too much in one mouthful but the images you were trying to depict mean well. Sometimes I got confused while reading it but I easily got back on track.

    Characters~
    I didn't really get to experience much of the characters emotions besides from the happiness of the wedding. The characters were however described in wonderful detail but for one or two if you want to get into the story and not get so lost I recommend reading the first story. (Long Live The Queen!)

    Grammar~
    Nothing about the grammar was pointed out while reading the story so I commend you for it. The set up of your updates are nice, short ones perfect for anyone looking for a good quick read but you also balanced it out with longer updates here and there.


    Summary Review~
    I would recommend it to readers who enjoy romance and royals. Or who just want to read a quick, nicely updated story.


    ~Thank you for letting
    me review your story.~
     
  8. Since Mel is doing reviews I'd love a Review of Sideline Guy, I really don't know how it's doing so far I'm still in the process of updating it, but since I was gone for a while I've been wondering if I should continue it.
     
  9. Oh Cin I'll review it as soon as I can! Personally I would enjoy it if you continue and hopefully others do as well.
     
  10. I would like you to review the thread "Story Time". The reason being that I need to know where the story needs improvement.
     
  11. I'll review your two stories with in the next two days. Sorry for making you guys wait though I'll try my best.
     
  12. Mel's Review Station


    Story: Sideline guy


    Written by: -_lilCindal-_-CinCin-_


    Extra Information: Unique~


    Originality~
    Truly I haven't read something like this written so well and that is also entertaining. The plot is unique in a very good way, leaving the child who couldn't talk after a horrible incident from basketball must try to recover.

    Interest~
    The chapters at the start could of been a little longer with the addition of a few more details. Sometimes there was a few too many 'I's used that could make it repetitive. Other then that I enjoyed reading each of the entires and they were each unique and I never got bored of them.

    Characters~
    Alright the characters are extremely cute in their own individual ways, you have shown them each with a different personality and style witch is shown wonderfully in the entries of each character. Emmer has dyslexia and with that Cin has found a creative way to show that by writing in his shoes, magnificent.

    Grammar~
    As I stated before just a few too many 'I's it might make the story more interesting by finding different ways to write it without it. Though so etimes using 'I's are a good choice. Sometimes I would find one error in the chapters but not a lot.


    Summary Review~
    I would recommend it to readers who something different, it is based around friendship and problems when you have a quirk that most kids don't.
     
  13.  umm could you review mine? It's "Perfection~The Not So Perfect Story". It's still unfinished and the story is still unraveling, but I'd love to know what you think of it.
     
  14. Sure I'd love to review it, it dent really if it is completed or not. I'll do it as soon as I finnish with Royals Review.
     
  15. Could you review The Destines Intertwine for you or The want or you.... The want for you is he first one (not as good haha) And The Destines Intertwine for You is the second one that's not yet finished
     
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  17. Mel's Review Station


    Story: Story Time


    Written by: Royal and Qin


    Extra Information: Extremely well formatted. Sadly only got up to part 4 since it has taken me so long to get to it.


    Originality~
    The idea is beautiful and is taken great care with, I have not read or heard many if not at all things like it. The Spanish added a nice touch and made me feel like you guys really cared about this story.

    Interest~
    In simple terms you got me hooked, still a bit shaky now and then with the writing where I was kinda confused but it made perfect sense once I worked it out. I never lost intreats at all which is really saying something for a person like me. The references made where cute and added a nice touch.

    Characters~
    I didn't get that much far into your story but I had a general sense about the characters and their relationships. I found the mother to put a smile on my face and the playful jokes the two mains would think of was well done.

    Grammar~
    A couple but not many tiny mistakes here and there. The dialect and description was exceptional but with a few more experimental wording could blow my mind. It was exceptionally formatted with the pages and lettering effects.


    Summary Review~
    Strong recommendation if you want great quality chapters with an interesting story. I hope I can get to read more of it.
     
  18. Hi can you do mine? It's called BLOODY MARY. :>
     
  19. Thank you very much.
     
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