Forbidden Love

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Lollipop12321 (01), Apr 4, 2013.

  1. Amy's POV

    It was just another normal day. I caught the bus to school,waited by the door for Lucy and chatted until the bell rang.
    We went in our first lesson,Maths but the teacher sitting at the front was not Mrs.Smith.
    It was a tall,handsome young man and when he stood up to greet us,I soon saw he was wearing the tighest pant EVER!
    All lesson, I couldn't help glancing at 'Mr.Roberts' and when the bell rang,I nearly cried.
    Oh,well I'll see you tomorrow,Mr.Sexy

    Daniel's POV


    Ugh,new school,new names to learn.
    I sat down in first lesson,hoping to have a quiet morning.
    These were the noisest bunch I'd ever seen,this was gonna be a long lesson.
    I waited for them to sit,and stood to greet them but when I did I saw the most beautiful girl I'd ever seen.
    Her long,blonde hair shaped her face perfectly,showing her beautiful,blue eyes.
    No,this is ridculous!She's 14 and I'm 26!But she's perfect.
    Throughout the lesson,I caught my self staring at her beautiful features.
    The bell rang after a long lesson,and I was abit sad.
    Oh,well see you tomorrow,Perfect.
     
  2. Sorry it's short! It's just a preview,if you like it I'll write more
     
  3. Interesting so far . Make sure to check for mistakes and put a space in certain places.

    Instead of Mrs.Smith make it Mrs. Smith (with a space) 
     
  4. I've been dying for a new teacher-student story! Thank god...BumpBumpBump
     
  5. This is just...
    Wow. Wow.
     
  6. Like it but in Amy's POV you didn't need to add quotation marks around Mr.Roberts. 
     
  7. When you're doing commas, do this:

    See you tomorrow, Perfect.

    With a space
     
  8. WRITE MORE!!!!!!
     
  9. Love it! Write more for us please
     
  10. What does bump mean?
     
  11. You guys do realise this was roughly a year ago, and the chances of the writer 1) Even still playing pimd or 2) Still being interested in writing is a very small sliver of chance.
    Stop bringing up dead posts for Isis sake.
     
  12. Write more! PLEASE! 
     
  13. Just testing
     
  14. Ooh nice it didnt work lol
     
  15. Aw well if it's updated, wall me please