The Diary

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by iDontLikePeople2, Feb 25, 2013.

  1. This is my first heir-hunting novel, I hope you like it.
    At the end of each chapter, I will let the readers decide what happens, much like 'Royal Treatment'. I thought it a good idea so I might as well give it a try.

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    The note made it clear. I was to leave the city before midnight tonight. My hands trembled, and the hairs on the back of my neck stood up as I read it.
    By midnight tonight, there will be no trace left of you. It will be like you never existed. If you are think you can outsmart me, I will kill every man, woman and child that helps you. Every one of them.

    It was 10pm. I had only two hours to escape, but I didn't know where to go. I tried phoning relatives, but the phone line got cut off. I tried googling motels near New York, but the internet went down. Nothing seemed to be going my way.

    I went downstairs, slipping the note in my back pocket. I sat in the living room with my mom, who I'd only been living with again for two weeks. I didn't want to tell her. I really didn't. Maybe I should use the same excuse my Dad used when he left. 'If I don't leave now, I'll be stuck here,' is what he said.

    I could see in my mom's eyes that she wasn't over my dad, and that Carl was just a re-bound boyfriend. I didn't want to hurt her, especially because she just got me back.

    In the end, I resorted to plan B, and made up the biggest lie I had ever told.
    'He broke up with you?' exclaimed my mom.
    'Yup, he was cheating on me,' I replied.
    'Jessica! You can't leave, not now!' She yelled up the stairs after me. I felt a tear run down my cheek and ran back down the stairs with my bag.
    'If I don't leave now, I'm gonna be stuck here just like dad!' I screamed as I slammed the door behind me.

    I got into my car and started the engine, I was now crying to my heart's extent. I broke my mom's heart.
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  2. It seems good quite so far, just maybe add a bit more detail. ^-^
     
  3. bump please
     
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    I pulled out of the driveway.'

    I stopped reading at that moment. I had just found my long-lost daughter's diary.
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    A SHORT PART TO KEEP YOU GUYS HOOKED!
     
  5. I like it. Bump!
     
  6. bump please
     
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    DECISION TIME!

    <Search for Jessica>
    <Search for Write of the Death Note>
     
  8. Soooo hard to pick!