Lunamon: ha! That takes care of that. Amy: wow your pretty strong for a rookie. Lunamon: I just wanted to protect you Amy. I know where we should look for your friends. Let's head towards the main village and see if they spotted your friends. Amy: alright then. Which way is it? Lunamon: just follow the main path. We better hurry, once it gets dark, more cracked digimon show up and I don't think we can handle them all. Amy: alright let's get going We both started traveling down the path to head towards the main village to see if any of my friends have been spotted. I still couldn't believe that I was in the digital world. I wonder, will I find my friends and will. I return home?
Still looking for that twinkle of detail, even though the writing style isn't my favourite I still like it.
Meh. Its alright. But it does need more details.. i encourage you to keep writing and do take your time. You can make tons of spelling errors if you rush
It's getting better. Damn I wanted the fire one! D: But just a suggestion, don't put your actions in hyphens (-) and what people say in quotation marks. (" "). I mean, yes, you are interacting with your Digimon, but it's a story. Bump
I want to see if I can try and make dialog boxes but I'll test that out later. Any ways I'll start working on the next chapter soon
Chapter 3 Amy: hey Lunamon, can I ask you something. Am I the first human you ever seen? Lunamon; yes but your not the first to set foot in the digital world. They said that a long time ago a human once busted the digital world. Amyoes he still come to the digital world? Cause maybe I can go back home they way that person did. Lunamom: I don't know. Your going to have to ask our chief that. He knows a lot of stuff outside of the Island. Amy: okay. We continued to walk and I was still think about the others if there okay. I'm not too worried about Liz and Leo, but Ali on the other hand is...well not the strongest of our group. He's more of the punching bag for Liz. I just hope there all okay. Amy:Lunamon, umm, why did you wanted to me my partner? Lunamon: well your the first human I ever seen and I wanted to make sure you were okay. Plus I herd when humans and digimon work together, they become the strongest pair. Well so I herd. Amy: what the.... A small flash of light come from Amy's pocket. I pulled out what was there and I got my self a digivise. Amy: A digivise? I know in the game you can help your digimon get stronger but I've never seen one like this. Lunamon: same here. I've never even seen a digivise. We finnaly reached the village. Amy: wow, I never seen anything like this in the game before. Lunamon: come Amy, let me take you to the chief. Maybe he can walk us down the right path. Amy: okay. We walk to the center of the village and went inside the small house. ???: Lunamon, it's good to see you again. Who's your new friend? Lunamon: this is Amy. She's a human in search to find her friends. ???: hmmm, well the name is jijimon. Amy would Lunamon happen to be your partner and you have a digivise? Amy: yeah, it just suddenly showed up in my pocket. Jijimon: I see, well that devise you got there is very powerful. It can help your partner digivolve or you can use cards to power your partner up. Amy: you mean like the trading cards? To bad I left them back at my home. I got no cards on me. Jijimon: it's alright I'll give you the ones I have. There in better use to you then me. Amy: thank you so much. But can I ask you one question? Have you herd of any other humans entering the digital world? Jijimon: I have not. But most likely they have partners with them to protect them. Don't worry about it. Amykay ~looks down disappointed- Jijimon: cheer up. I bet you will find them soon just wait. Lunamon: don't worry, I bet we will find them. Amy: I guess your right I took the cards from jijimon. There where only stat boosters such as strength speed and defense. Amy: thank you. Where do you think we should start look? Jijimon: well if you head further down north you will end up at the city but it's a long ways from here. Could take days to get there. Lunamon: don't worry, me and Amy can make it. I'll protect her on her way there. Don't you worry. Amy: wait, jijimon, I have one more question, what's a crack digimon? We were attack by one and it seemed very agitative and aggressive towards us. Jijimon: hmm, well I don't know what makes a digimon crack, all I know is all they want to do it fight and destroy. Next time you run into one try turning it into a digi egg. That should purify it and turn it to normal. Amy: okay then. Lunamon: alright! Tomorrow we set out on our journey! This is going to be so cool! Amy: yeah let's just spend the night here. I'm a little tired and can use a rest. Jijimon: your always welcomed here. Just rest up and you can leave tomorrow. We were given a place to stay at and as the sun set I was still worried about the the others. I hope they got good partners with them. Im kind of curious on how there partners will look. Well I better get some rest for tomorrow... Ali:Aaaa! Leave me alone! Help! ???: Stop running away, I just want to talk! Wait human! Amy: that sounded like Ali.... Now here's your turn. Choose Ali's partner
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