sorry about that, i had a problem loading the story, here goes... ~~~~~>> Today is a relatively cold day, more so than usual. It is a friday afternoon, i have just been released from an agonisingly long day at high school. I am walking home, the feeling of the rain cool against my bare skin. iam walking at a seemingly slow pace. I am a few blocks away from my apartment and i look forward to a good night's rest! I finally arrive home, soaked to my shorts. I quickly unlock the door, drop my sachel and head towards the shower ~~> I feel cool as a cucumber now that im out of those soggy clothes! I raid the fridge in seek of something to eat. Nothing?! Just great!! Trust a lazy room mate to eat all my stuff. I wish to go to bed early, but something is troubling me, a vague thought lost in my subconscious. It worries me so. I feel as though im in for a bit of trouble, but i try to keep clear of thoughts like that. I would rather just wait for my lousy roomie to return with snacks. ~~~~>
Nice I like where it's going keep going though so I know really where you are going with it also I am doing this them I am doing this Try to shake it up okay
Saturday morning, the sound of the alarm thuds loudly in the back of my head. I lift myself up grogilly andstretch out. I have been dreading this day. Mr. Joans, my P.E teacher, wants me to come in and do some extra credit assignments. Apparently jogging around the track a few times doesnt count as "exercise", dooche! i sum up the strength to get up, take a shower , change and leave. ~~~~>>> I never thought i'd be in school on a saturday, yet here i am. I walk through the hallways shich are usually atuffed with the loud and rambunctious students. I take my last deep breath before walking into the dodgeball court. I was greeted by the warm smiles of the few learners who were there. I finally nade my way through to my best friend tom who looked just as depressed to be here as i did. We exchanged a few laughs before talking to a few others . It had been 20 minutes since i arrived and mr. Joans still hadn't arrived. I began to worry as though something had happened to him. A cold chill went down my spine. I tensed up. My instinct told me to get out and leave but my curiosity got the better of me and we all left to see if we could find him. We split into two groups in the hope of adding to our chances of finding him. In my group was thomas, (my best friend) the short asian girl , amy. She seemed slughtly thin and wore heavy glasses. The final of our group was sarah. She was tall, had a rich brown hair and deep green eyes. We searched in a few of places including the teachers lounge, principals office and mr. Joans' office.. we were out of luch and felt it be best that we should call the others and leave. Just then we heard loud screams and we ran towards the area where it came from...
we ran down the hall to the place we thought the scream emerged from. We found the other group in a state of shock, a few of them sobbing. I pushed past them to see what was the cause of all this suspense. Mr. Joans'' lifeless body lay there, his left arm had been ripped out of its socket, his clothing, or what remained of his clothing, was torn and in pieces. His left eye had popped out. I was petrified. He had marks, or wounds, all over his body, he seemed to have been bitten. He stank terribly. Blood was splattered all over the floor. We all took a few steps back. "We gotta get the heck outa here!!" Sarah yelled, her voice seemed stern and shaken. just then we heard some noises... BwamBwamBwam!!! we turned around towards the noise, seems whatever got mr. J has planned to get us next. These creatures were ravenous, filthy. Seemingly dead. Their eyes remained shut , but it was as though they could see perfectly. They were pale skinned and one of the two had mr. Joans'' arm. They began to come towards us, in a slow and mocking pace. My adrenalin pumped, my lungs filled with fear, facing the unknown. "Get back, NOW!!" Was all i could utter to the girls. Myself and the other two guys stood there hoping they would turn and leave, they began to run. By some luck i happened to see a rusty metal pipe on the ground, i hoped it would be a good weapon. One of the two jumped towards me... by instinct, i struck it right in the head sending it flying directly onto the ground. It seemed to have no effect on it because instantly, it was back on its feet...
Very suspenseful, keeps me interested with the story. Although some miner typos that can be easily forgotten. Very good.
Thanjs for the reviews, but this story has been discontinued. I have started another with the sane topic and will update you all as it goes along. Thanks