I wrote this is it any good?

Discussion in 'Off Topic' started by rockst1003, Feb 20, 2013.

  1. Verse
    People always complain
    Always tryin to mess with my brain
    Tellin me I'm not the same
    That I'm the one to blame
    Second verse
    Tired of being controlled
    Doing what I'm told
    Breaking out of this mold
    It's time to take control
    Build
    Of my life
    Of this game
    Blowin out the final flame
    Im on my own
    Im not a clone
    Tired of going unknown
    Chorus
    You don't choose my future for me
    And i think that its time you finally see
    (you can't control me)
    And that's a guarantee
    Don't care if you dissagree
    I'm doing this for me
    (I'm gonna succeed)
    And that's a guarantee
    Verse
    Now I'm in control
    Reachin my goal
    Not playin a role
    Taking back what you stole
    (the real me)
    Second verse
    And no I'm not crazy
    No I'm not lazy
    Get to know me
    Before you judge me, baby
    Chorus
    You don't choose my future for me
    And i think that its time you finally see
    (you can't control me)
    And that's a guarantee
    Don't care if you dissagree
    I'm doing this for me
    (I'm gonna succeed)
    And that's a guarantee
    Bridge
    You can believe all these lies
    I've heard them all a thousand times
    But tonight I'm breaking free
    And that's a guarantee
    Chorus
    You don't choose my future for me
    And i think that its time you finally see
    (you can't control me)
    And that's a guarantee
    Don't care if you dissagree
    I'm doing this for me
    (I'm gonna succeed)
    And that's a guarantee
    First verse
    People always complain
    Always tryin to mess with my brain
    Tellin me im not the same
    That I'm the one to blame
     
  2. Don't care if you dissagree
    I'm doing this for me
    (I'm gonna succeed)
    And that's a guarantee
    First verse
    People always complain
    Always tryin to mess with my brain
    Tellin me im not the same
    That I'm the one to blame
     
  3. ...It's hard to tell by just lyrics.
     
  4. To the tune of "Old McDonald Had A Farm"
     
  5. Pretty good, add a good voice and I'd listen to it
     
  6. Listen to the song chalk outline by three days grace i kinda want it to sound like that
     
  7. thanx hawk, now this song makes no sense cuz my brain keeps trying to put e i e i o at the end of each line.

    back on topic… i like what you're trying to say but i'm not a big fan of ending each line in rhyme.
     
  8. There's stealers out there,

    U should watch out where u post your shit.

    Otherwise, pretty cool.
     
  9. Parcae speaks the truth. So I give this a grumpy cat NO on the good scale. 
     
  10. grumpy cat!!! lol

    ty for the mental image 
     
  11. Ala Avril punk rock style and l would love it ....
     
  12. Yea man lyrics only hard to go by. Does not look to bad tho I've seen alot worse. If you can add the music t it and the tune then it's be worth a listen to
     
  13. I'd definitely like to listen to it 
     
  14. Thanks guy n more of a rock tune