I decided to write again..But, on a more serious level. I hope you like my story and will leave feed back so I can improve it. _______________________________ I was 5 years old when it began. A warm September morning. I was holding my mom's finger walking in my mary jane shoes and small navy blue dress. My rosey cheeks were pink as ever and I couldn't stop smiling. "Mommy! It's my first day in Kindergarden!" "I know Mina aren't you excited. You get to meet other kids your age." "Mhm I'm going to make alot of friends today!" Her smile made me even more happy. My mom is such a tender and caring person. She was happy I started school today and so was I. The school wasn't that far from my tiny home. My brother Isaac and Cousin Falicity were already in the school yard talking with their friends. I ran to my brother and jumped on him. His warm embrace, his soft kiss on my forehead and his warm smile. I looked back at my mom waving goodbye. She was fighting back her tears and smiling waving back. I giggled and held my older brother's hand as he walked me to my class room. "So Mina you ready for kindergarden?" Ally asked. "Mhm I'm all ready!" "Hehe Mina your such a happy kid you know that." My brother spoke. "I know Isaac. Thats how mommy taught us remember! No matter what happens nobody can take your smile and happiness away!" They laughed and held my tiny hands walking me to my classroom. I saw my teacher for the first time. She was a beautiful old lady. Short with salt and pepper colored hair. She had a smile that could light up an entire room. "Hi I'm Mina Reyes!" "Well Hello Mina. I'm your teacher Mrs.Lopez" I looked at my brother as he descended down the hall way with my cousin. I looked back at Mrs.Lopez and walked into the class room where the other kids were playing. When they saw me it went silent. They all looked at me in aw. I was happy. But, little did I know that meeting my classmates will make my innocent little life a tragedy with only an introduction. "Hi I'm Mina Reyes!" __________________________ Please leave feedback!
Update _________________________ "Hi I'm Mina Reyes" Only four words I said. Four words that turned my life upside down. The room was silent. The other kids just stared at me. Some looked at me with friendly smiles and little waves. Others just glared down at me like if I stole their favorite toy. I looked over at Mrs.Lopez, she just smiled at me and pushed me forward into the class. "Your name is Mina?" A short haired girl asked. She was fairly pretty. Dark brown hair, little freckles sprinkled on her face. Her big brown eyes in hope for a new friend. "Yes. Its nice to meet you." I smiled seeing that this girl was happy to see that I was willing to try and be friends with her. We sat at our small rounded table and talked about being in school for the first time. She had started the same day as me, just an hour before me so she had a chance to meet the other kids. I looked around, everyone was staring at me like if I was an alien. I was so serial. We were giving colorimg pages once everyone sat down. I was so precise on coloring inside the lines when someone pulled my ponytail. "Haha new girl !" A bot taunted "Ow!! Hey quit it!" I yelped in agony "No way this is fun!" I fought back my tears as this boy kept pulling my hair each time I got free from his grip. When he finally let go I ran to the private bathroom that was in the class and cried in one of the stalls. 'Why was he being mean to me? Was I being bad? My head hurts now and he made me cry! I don't want to go back there.' I cried and cried till the friendly girl found me. She locked the door behind her and hugged me. Comforting me and whiping my tears away. "No worry Mina. Jose is a being meany head. Please don't cry." "I want my brother!" "I'll go look for him! Its free time now and I seen big kids walking by. What's his-" She was cut off when we heard a boy calling my name. It sounded like my brother. I dried my eyes and fixed my ponytail. I stepped out the bathroom laughing with the girl. "Oh by the way Mina my name is Eve." "Eve? that's a nice name!" "Mina!" Isaac called out. "Isaac!" I smiled and ran to him and felt his warm hug embracing me tight. I felt comfort from my brother. And I knew I can tell him what happened. But, not now. I don't want to look like a big baby. Even though some kids are laughing at me already since I just came out the bathroom after crying. And now they're teasing me about hugging my brother. These kids are so mean to me. But....But, why?Did I do something wrong? _________________________ Did little Mina do something wrong?