Friends?

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by -_iBrooke_-, Jan 13, 2013.

  1. I slowly walked down the dark road.Usually I would be with my best friend Brooke,but since she's been popular it's like she doesn't know me any more.We have been friends for as long as I could remember.I hold me books even tighter,just thinking about her.Suddenly I hear feet running.I gaze behind me seeing Brooke."Hey."She says nearly out of breath.I don't reply.She seems to answer for me."Okay,So guess what!"She whispers/yells."What now..."I mumble."Ok,so Melanie brought cigars to school,"Brooke began."So,of course you knowing me,I tried it.That shit was like;POOF!"Exclaimed Brooke."YOU DID WHAT!"I said nearly screaming."Chill Elise!It was one puff!Geez!"Brooke argued.I could tell Brooke would never be the same.It was like Melanie was her new bff."Helllooo?"Brooke said for me.I still didn't answer.What happened to the old Brooke?The good girl?

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    Sorry guys!Thats the end!I hoped you like I'll update soon!love u guys
     
  2. Try paragraphs, punctuation, and spacing. :|
     
  3. Urn gohan I tried and I made this so I can get GOOD STUFF POSTED If u didn't know or u were Stupid.
     
  4. Um, he was giving you good feedback. You need to create paragraphs, work on spacing and punctuation.
     
  5. whatever and in case u didn't see there are spaces I have auto correct DUH
     
  6. This isn't like this is getting published in new York tines
     
  7. I like 
     
  8. Ok I'm updating enjoy!!!!
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    Brooke's P.O.V
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    Okay,now Elise is seriously taking shit wayyyy to serious.Shes never been the type to be fun.I really don't even care if we're not friends.Its not like she ever was to me so,why should I?I still have Melanie.I sat on my plush bed texting my boyfriend,lolling at him.When I heard a loud "BANG,BANG,BANG".I rushed down stairs seeing police and fire trucks and the ambulance!My mom was crying,I rushed over to see what happened."Y-y-your Father!"She sobbed,I immediately ran over to the ambulance.I saw a black bag,Is that my dad?"Excuse me?Is that my dad?"I asked as if I were to cry."Yeah,if his name happens to be Hal Davison."The women said.I Burst into tears,my brother came to comfort me."It's okay sis."He said hugging me.I don't know what made all this happen I just wish it never happened.What did my dad do to deserve this?
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    Elise's P.O.V
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    I got a quick call from Brooke.Me being stubborn I didn't answer.I was always there for Brooke but,she totally blew it today and that was my last straw.She called me again and still I didn't answer.She called me about fifty times do,on the forty ninth call I answered."What do you want."I said annoyed.I only heard sobbing."Brooke?Whats wrong?"I asked.


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    Well that's all!I hope this was better guys!