Death Day

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Jazmine786 (01), Jan 9, 2013.

  1. Scarlett's POV ( flashback )
    "Ugh,mom how much longer?" I was bored and I had a huge headache. I wish I could just take a nap sometimes."an hour" my mom said. "I wish we could teleport everywhere!" I had said " me too " she replied. I want some action in my life,I thought. Yet did I know that I would have a lot of action soon enough.
     
  2. Sorry it's not very good but its my first story
     
  3. Okay, here's my advice:
    ~Use paragraphs. Start a new one every time a new person is speaking.
    ~Use lots of detail and description.
    ~Capitalize the first letter in every sentence. Including dialogue.
     
  4. Totally agree.
    Elaborate what they're feeling, it makes the writing look like a piece of art.
     Angel gave me that advice
     
  5. I'm prob Hanna close this since no one is reading
     
  6. Gonna.stupid spell check
     
  7. Gonna isn't really a word .-. In stories.