High school Heartbreak

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by LilMissSnowy, Dec 3, 2012.

  1. REALLY SHORT UPDATE

    SKIPPING TO THAT SATURDAY
    Me and my best friend were finally planning a sleepover and I got a text

    -I read the text(hey I heard something going around my school is there anything you aren't telling me?) I looked at my phone as my heart sank-

    My best friend finally came over

    Mays pov
    I looked at her all happy and wondered if she knew I didn't want to have to be the one to tell her the rumor going around my whole school about her but she's my best friend I could keep it a secret

    -May looked at me and said do you know the rumor going around?

    -I looked at her hurt and shocked and afraid not really knowing what she was talking about -as she started to talk I bit my lower lip nervously-
     
  2. I like it, even though its a bit cliché. I have to applaud you. People have you critiques and you used them in your writing unlike other first time writers. Just maybe lengthen your updates a bit. WE WANT MORE!
     
  3. Love it very real keep em coming