POETRY #2

It's really good and deep well done 

 

It's really good, I would hold back on emoji use in the poem though.

Mind if I post a few of mine?

 

Listen

Listen to the sound it makes
The ground it hits
The floor it breaks
The musical shatter
An earthly clatter
Oh the noises our messes make

Listen near my dear
For now you hear them loud and clear
But one day the children will be gone
Taking their joyful chaos with them

So won't you sit and have a listen?
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Untitled

Waking in a cloud of fog
"where am I?"
Slowly noticing the pool of blood
Surrounding your body
As your eyes slowly adjust
A body enters your field of vision
Your heart races
As you try to remember
All that comes to mind
Is you were in your room
Than the world went black
You crawl over to the body
To check the pulse
With a tremnling hand
"dead....", the word barely escapes
As your stomach starts to give out
Just barely managing to hold that in
You slowly get up and walk out
Away from the scene to think
But all you you remeber is blackness
Than your head starts throbbing
You feel like your losin your grip
And fight as images flash through
You..a knife....stabbing...blood
And finally passing out
But...that wasnt you...
Whats happening to me....
You wonder as you almost black out
But a small voice enters your head
We did this...they deserved it
Finally you snap as you realize
Your not the only person
Deep in your concious lies another
Waiting to take over
To do evil
As the fog finally lifts
You reach for the knife
As the voice screams NO
You smile and with your
Last bit if control stab yourself
Right through the heart
As you drop to your knees all your
Confusion is gone and you feel
Like you won against this evil inside
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Untitled (unfinished)

They sing a song of lonely deaths
Of arrow wounds in the chest
That ended a life dearer than mine
In a war for something more divine