Umm no offense but isn't this a Book already made...My LIL sis has this Book...it's called "The Boy Next door", as well, and it sounds just like it cause I've heard my sis read it...so...Umm...just wanted to know!! P.s. not here to create any problems, just wanted to ask if that's where you got the idea from?? But thanks anyway!!
Ok I'm absolutely in love with the story I just read it today plz update soon wall me when u do plz and thank u
There are a ton of mistakes in this story, I read it from the first update to the current one all today. At first since this book seemed to have been going on for some time so I thought that it would have been improved. The main plot of the story is predictable but cute. Girl is single. Girl meets hot male neighbor. Girl and neighbor are both young and have suitable dating age. Girl and boy constantly flirt. Girl and boy fall in love. Happily ever after. I'm not saying your plot isn't good, it's simple but sweet. It's the way you actually presented your story, all the events were not described descriptively. When you flashback it always seems to have something meaningful (deeper) (for the flashback scenario), not something you can see in all kinds of stories as what's happening currently. Do you understand? I feel like I'm being a little confusing now lol. And you punctuation and capitalization. You start a sentence with a capital letter. This also applies to dialogues. Eg. He held her hand and looked into her eyes, smiling, he said, "You'll always be my best friend." You put a capital letter at the start of the dialogue. You end the dialogue with a punctuation. And again you start a sentence with a capital letter. This also applies to names. She's not destiny. She is Destiny. And she seems a little... I don't really know how to describe this lol. From what you first described about the girl she seems to be the type of girl that is well liked by everyone. Ironically she has only one friend. And do you actually let people you have known for a day kiss you on the cheek? Wouldn't that be a little...fast? And also there was an almost kiss when they just met? Is this a story where they turn out to magically become mates? (Werewolf) That's why they could have an almost kiss upon their (first?) meeting? I don't know. And if I'm not mistaken in the story Jonathan and her are reeeaally close. They have became good friends. So how would she not know if Jonathan and Mike had became best friends? ._. She didn't notice them together? There are many other things I can point out about this story but my comment is already too long lol. Also, when you put a comma, you add a spacing behind it. I'm sure you know this, so do it maybe? A lot of editing and proof reading could really help you story. Jyjy.