._. yu guys are harsh.... Yu wouldnt like if people spoke to yu the way yur speaking to him.... And ifyu dont like his story then dont read it plain and simple
i bet that you couldnt do any better than this i haven't even gotten into the story yet its just an intro and either or i can still post here and keep it alive anyway
, uumm.. I would agree with Adam but I would put it in a less harsh way.. It is a bit inappropriate to be honest with you, not a fantastic way to start off a story, but.. •Try reading some different stories first before trying to make your own. •Try reading Adams because his is good and it will give you a little bit of an idea how to use grammar, punctuation and things like that. Or follow some people who are experienced at writing stories and get them to give you some tips.. ~Best Wishes, Pix.
By the way, I'm not being mean here. •Maybe try writing it when you are in a better state then. Instead of trying to write a story after all that, try planning it bit after bit at a time. I would even think of trying it after all that.. I couldn't..
My advice; • Follow someone who has already made a story to give you some tips. •Go to sleep. •Plan your story. •Think about grammar and punctuation. • Don't take criticism to hard.
Don't blame this on sleep deprivation. When I used to write I was suffering from insomina and it used to drive me mad, but my stories were NEVER this horrible
Nothing makes me want to punch a brick more than people giving sob stories. Nobody here has the following 1. Depression 2. Sucidial thoughts 3. Abuse 4. Bullying I can not count all the times I have been on here and seen this, unless everyone on here has depression and is bullied it's all a bunch of crap. Just saying... ._.
I slowly wake up in a daze of confusion as my Alarm clock wakes me up "did that really just happen" i thought it could have." I slowly walk over to the bath room to fix my dark scruffy brown hair and quickly put on my work uniform . I noticed on my way through the small apartment that the spare room door was just slightly openi decide to open it fully and see who was in side there was only my sister and a note saying." Alice i have left for the best its not you its me i promise love Amber." i lightly called over to Alice to tell her i was going to work and nothin so I tried once Again still nothing so I maneuver around next to the bed moving all her stuff when i roll her over to see her entire rist full of tiny razor cuts. I looked in horror at my lifeless sister as i immediately pull out my phone and call for an ambulanc.