Hey it's me again this is like my fifth story I hope you enjoy Macy's Pov: I swept back my chocolate brown hair looking into the mirror at my reflection. I smile at my curly brown hair and apply my cherry red lip stick. Smoothing down my purple off the shoulder top I throw on my black converse over my skinny jeans. "MACY COME ON LET'S GO!" My mom yelled. "OKAY MOM CHILL IM COMING!" I grab my black shoulder bag and run downstairs grabbing toast and jumping into my purple mustang I drive to school. I arrive at school sighing "Ugh," I jump out meeting up with my friends. "Hey Macy what's up ratchet chick," my friend Taylor laughs. I giggle "Hey ratchet Taylor, get to class home girl." "Haha very funny lets go girl come on Virginia," she grabs Virginia's arm and mine. We walk to my first period and say our goodbyes I walk in and sit beside my friend Dana "Hey." She smiles "How you doin?" I laugh. "It's school it's all the same boring routine," I watch the clock dying to get to second period knowing he would be there. I smiled at the thought of seeing his face and oh so familiar smile. Yup I had a crush on a total hottie he was a baseball player. I laughed at the thought of him ever thinking of a girl like me! It was crazy I would never be good enough or a guy like him. I sighed and listened to my teacher lecture of the principles of design. So what do you think? Is it good? stupid? lame? Great? Boring? Awesome? Please leave feedback
Ugh sorry so many errors I know I promise to get better I'm hit really not fully awake my writing and grammar suck
I can't help it I must update Macy's Pov: I sighed as I looked at the clock almost jumping out of my seat. Only ten more minutes and I could see him again, I smiled to myself. His gorgeous smile popped into my head again and I blushed. "Macy! You okay?" Dana looked at me concerned. I laughed "I'm fine just excited to get out of this class!" She giggled "I know me too," I tapped my foot impatiently come on come on! The clock seemed to tick slower and I sighed resting my head on my arms. I slowly drifted off into thoughts of him and I running away together. The vision was perfect just like he was. His amazing light brown eyes the color of honey and soft brown hair always swept perfectly. He was the perfect height for me talk enough so that I could smile up at him and he could lean down and kiss me. I giggled 'oh Macy he would never' I thought to myself. I sighed sadly I wish he thought I me the way I thought I him. But I knew he would never see me the way I saw him. His name is- The bell rang and I jumped out of my seat and into the hallways. Do you like?
will there be a "twist and shout" twist in the story? And btw I was reading and I noticed slight similarities to my story.....just saying.
I noticed this, and you did a better job the second post, but be careful that you're staying consistent with what tense you're writing in.
This my own piece and I have never heard of ur story I haven't really been in fan fiction and I'm sorry if it seems similar to your story haha thanks may and Maria. I know I've noticed Royale my bad I was really tired when I typed this
Update Macy's Pov: I walked along Dana's side dreaming of him. "So we have a test tomorrow! You studying?" She asked. I laughed "Do I ever study?" "Haha true," we walked through the courtyard and split through the middle and waved goodbye. I searched the crowd looking for him. I gasped when I saw him, Alex, god he was perfect. We made eye contact and he smiled at me, I almost fell to the ground as I forced myself to look away. I walked to second period smiling. ************************************************* Alex's Pov: I walked to my friends in the courtyard laughing with them talking about last nights game. "Man Alex your pitch was amazing man!" Jack laughed. "Haha thanks dude. But you hit the home run!" I pretended to pay attention to the conversation,but I couldn't. My mind was somewhere else, it was with her. I searched the crowd for her, where was she? Then as if heaven sent her itself the sun shined on her like an angel. I panicked inside when we made eye contact but all I could do was smile. My heart sank when she looked away I felt empty. Why would I even think she would like a guy like me? Macy was perfect and different from all the sluts at our school. I smiled to myself she was gonna be mine someday. I was gonna make sure she fell for me as hard as I fell for her. Feedback