The edge of the blade

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by supers0nic, Nov 5, 2012.

  1. I was flicking through the channels on the TV, when suddenly, I saw a headline on the news that cauught my eye. 'Woman named as Debby Pickering found dead in her own home.' I was shocked, I found out she was a woman that lived on my estate, "better watch out for this guy," I thought. I couldn't stop thinking about this all day, I had the sudden urge to kill someone right before I went to bed. The next day, I woke up, I thought I might as well check the news to see if there had been any breakthrough in the case. There was two headlines that caught my eye, one, reading man named Robert Gilmore discovered as dead in his bedroom, the body was discovered this morning by his daughter when she found the front door wide open. The second headline reading, potential murder weapon and fingerprin
     
  2. fingerprint found, which was tracked directly to me. I was completely shocked to find out I was a suspect. All day I was thinking could it have been me? That night I stayed awake until 3am when I slept until 9am in the moring, to wake up and find a bloody knife under my pillow. It is me I thought.
     
  3. This sounds like mine it's awesome
     
  4. I like it, it's interesting. Just add more detail and don't rush it.
     
  5. Also use paragraphs and check your grammar. Other thenthat it's pretty good.
     
  6. cool, I hereby declare u the best writer in pimd:) I love all ur stories.
     
  7. It awesome!!!!! Update!!!!
     
  8. Wonder what'll happen next. Love cliff hangers.
     
  9. Thanks guys update comin out soon