Infected: Chapter 1: New Beginning " you finish yet Ivan?" I asked my one of my best friend who was working on his English honor project. I had to stay behind because I needed to help him out on the project since he was my partner and if he didn't finish it then I would fail as well. " give me 10 to 15 more minutes Dean don't rush me I just started working on the project 10 minutes ago." He responded. " Same excuse as always" I though to myself since he has been working on that project for almost 1 hour. I got up and went to look outside the window sighting. " what's with the gloomy look Dean?" Stephanie asked walking toward me. I always felt miserable being around her knowing full well that she was one of the most popular girl on school while I was the nerdiest person you will ever meet, the only thing we had common was that we both loved to play the same sports. " just bore out of my mind Stephanie, I'm here waiting for Ivan to finish the English project so that we can go home" " umm Dean I think you're also forgotten about Marcus who is also helping you on the project." She reminded me pointing to where he was sitting at typing on the computer. " do you always have to remind of everything?" I asked getting up and looking outside the window. " hey guys, I think none of you are gonna believe me but you three should come read this article I found online." Marcus said sounding scare. I actually didn't know why but when he said those words at that moment I just knew something terrible was gonna happen. " it also seems like theirs a video about it also" he added. I went to go see the news report and this is what I saw: ><><><><><><><><><><><><><><> " we are sorry to interrupt the special program, but we had just been giving report that … ><><><><><><><><><><><><><><> We never finish watching the news report since we heard someone scream from outside the school. The scream was so loud that my ears started to bleed(we not really its just a way of saying they started to hurt). I went to the window to try and find where scream came from and I couldn't believe my eyes in what I saw.
I'm interested to see what happens next, though based on the title it sounds like a zombie story. Some concerns I have with it though is the spelling and grammar. As well as punctuation. Remember to proof before you post
Chapter 2: Lost Friend I just looked in disbelief and couldn't believe my eyes." Dean, are those Zombies?" Stephanie asked. I couldn't respond but just looked at them. " nah, those are just freaks wearing zombie costumes and trying to scare us." I responded looking at them. " seriously Dean, can't you see what's happening outside yet you still don't believe what's going on is there, Is there something wrong with you?" Stephanie said yelling at me. " SHUT UP I JUST CAN'T BELIEVE SOMETHING THAT ISN'T REAL LIKE THIS CRAP." I snapped yelling at her completely mad. " DON'T YOU DARE YELL AT ME, YOU'RE JUST THAT PATHETIC GUY NOBODY CARES ABOUT." When she said that at that moment I was just heart broken and surprised that someone calm as her finally got mad. I just stare at her in shock and got my book bag and left the library and went to the top of the rooftop. I stayed there for almost 5 minutes when she came running toward me. " Dean we need to get out now, those things have invaded almost half the half school." She said with a worried look on her face. " LEAVE ME ALONE." I said. I looked at her face who looked like she was about to died. " why am I being mean to her and avoiding to think of what's happening as real?" I questioned myself. " it won't be my fault if you get bitten and turn into one of them." She said when out of nowhere one of those thing appeared and bit her. " AHHHH." She yelled as that thing ripped her throat and took some of Stephanie flesh eating it. I grabbed a steel pipe that I saw on the floor and hit the zombie on the head with it. The zombie fell dead and I looked at Stephanie who was on the floor yelling out in pain grabbing her throat. " Help me Dean." She said with tears running on her face. I turned my back on her and left her there. " Dean don't leave me please." She said crying. I watched her for a few second and walked toward still holding the steel pipe and when I was next to her I lifted it up and slammed the steel pipe on her head for more then 7 times. " I'm sorry." I said to her as I jumped off the roof top on top of a school bus. I smashed the window and hi-wire the bus then closed the window and drove away tears running on my face. <><><><><><><><><><><><><><>< This is the update for today, I will update the story tomorrow at night or in the morning.
Try using more colorful words than said. And instead of all caps rage, try saying shouted or something.