Infected

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by -Knight, Nov 5, 2012.

  1. Infected: Chapter 1: New Beginning

    " you finish yet Ivan?" I asked my one of my best friend who was working on his English honor project. I had to stay behind because I needed to help him out on the project since he was my partner and if he didn't finish it then I would fail as well.

    " give me 10 to 15 more minutes Dean don't rush me I just started working on the project 10 minutes ago." He responded. " Same excuse as always" I though to myself since he has been working on that project for almost 1 hour.

    I got up and went to look outside the window sighting. " what's with the gloomy look Dean?" Stephanie asked walking toward me. I always felt miserable being around her knowing full well that she was one of the most popular girl on school while I was the nerdiest person you will ever meet, the only thing we had common was that we both loved to play the same sports.

    " just bore out of my mind Stephanie, I'm here waiting for Ivan to finish the English project so that we can go home"

    " umm Dean I think you're also forgotten about Marcus who is also helping you on the project." She reminded me pointing to where he was sitting at typing on the computer.

    " do you always have to remind of everything?" I asked getting up and looking outside the window.

    " hey guys, I think none of you are gonna believe me but you three should come read this article I found online." Marcus said sounding scare. I actually didn't know why but when he said those words at that moment I just knew something terrible was gonna happen. " it also seems like theirs a video about it also" he added. I went to go see the news report and this is what I saw:
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    " we are sorry to interrupt the special program, but we had just been giving report that …
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    We never finish watching the news report since we heard someone scream from outside the school. The scream was so loud that my ears started to bleed(we not really its just a way of saying they started to hurt). I went to the window to try and find where scream came from and I couldn't believe my eyes in what I saw.
     
  2. Capitalisation n punctuation
     
  3. Rocks but needs improvement
     
  4. Cool but needs better grammer
     
  5. I'm interested to see what happens next, though based on the title it sounds like a zombie story. Some concerns I have with it though is the spelling and grammar. As well as punctuation. Remember to proof before you post
     
  6. Bump wanna read next part..!
     
  7. Bump.Its good, just remember capital letters and to proof read.
     
  8. Ill update the story in 1 hour
     
  9. Yes! You do that.
     
  10. Chapter 2: Lost Friend

    I just looked in disbelief and couldn't believe my eyes." Dean, are those Zombies?" Stephanie asked. I couldn't respond but just looked at them.

    " nah, those are just freaks wearing zombie costumes and trying to scare us." I responded looking at them.

    " seriously Dean, can't you see what's happening outside yet you still don't believe what's going on is there, Is there something wrong with you?" Stephanie said yelling at me.

    " SHUT UP I JUST CAN'T BELIEVE SOMETHING THAT ISN'T REAL LIKE THIS CRAP." I snapped yelling at her completely mad.

    " DON'T YOU DARE YELL AT ME, YOU'RE JUST THAT PATHETIC GUY NOBODY CARES ABOUT." When she said that at that moment I was just heart broken and surprised that someone calm as her finally got mad. I just stare at her in shock and got my book bag and left the library and went to the top of the rooftop. I stayed there for almost 5 minutes when she came running toward me.

    " Dean we need to get out now, those things have invaded almost half the half school." She said with a worried look on her face.

    " LEAVE ME ALONE." I said. I looked at her face who looked like she was about to died. " why am I being mean to her and avoiding to think of what's happening as real?" I questioned myself.

    " it won't be my fault if you get bitten and turn into one of them." She said when out of nowhere one of those thing appeared and bit her. " AHHHH." She yelled as that thing ripped her throat and took some of Stephanie flesh eating it.

    I grabbed a steel pipe that I saw on the floor and hit the zombie on the head with it. The zombie fell dead and I looked at Stephanie who was on the floor yelling out in pain grabbing her throat. " Help me Dean." She said with tears running on her face. I turned my back on her and left her there.

    " Dean don't leave me please." She said crying. I watched her for a few second and walked toward still holding the steel pipe and when I was next to her I lifted it up and slammed the steel pipe on her head for more then 7 times. " I'm sorry." I said to her as I jumped off the roof top on top of a school bus. I smashed the window and hi-wire the bus then closed the window and drove away tears running on my face.
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    This is the update for today, I will update the story tomorrow at night or in the morning.
     
  11. That was harsh  But bump!
     
  12. Try using more colorful words than said. And instead of all caps rage, try saying shouted or something.
     
  13. That's nowhere as harsh as what's gonna happen on the next update raven 
     
  14. This not *