Hi this is ny second story and i will try alot harder not to stuff up and make it a good one and im going to us my name and random ones so if you want to be in it wall me and somethings i will wright are true and have happend to me orba friend ****************** Its the last term if school everyones exited and happy but there is still a long way to go. My name is Mathew and i no what your thinking his nickname must be Mat but no its Carpet, get it Mathew to Mat to Carpet it sucks but other than that lifes average for me till i got pushed through a window and moved schools. So i started at my new school and everyone wanted to be my friend and i mean EVERYONE it sucked because i like to be alone alot. When i became the not so new kid and was there often people left me alone exept for my real friends Kieren,Liam,Bo,Daniel and Brandon but one girl wouldnt leave me alone she was pretty hot and in my year level all my friends wanted to date her exept for me the last thing on my mind was a girlfriend. A few weeks past and there was a party every one went so did i the girl who literaly stalked me at school was there and she was in a tight black dress and all the boys were over her yet again not me she walked up to me and said "Come with me i want to show you something." i said ok and went with her and did NOT expect to see what i did ************ I hope you guys like it Comment Critisize And Follow me thanks guys Bye For now ill update daily untill you ask me to stop or i get bord
Ok my update **************** So as i was saying i did not expect to see what i did she took me to a small room and on the bed was another girl about sixteen or seventeen and she said "Hey there handsome come sit down." I was literally about to run when i relisex that the other girl had pushed me to th bed oh y
Ok my update **************** So as i was saying i did not expect to see what i did she took me to a small room and on the bed was another girl about sixteen or seventeen and she said "Hey there handsome come sit down." I was literally about to run when i relised that the other girl had pushed me to the bed. I forgot to tell you hed name the stalkers name was Carly and the older girl was named Aisha i think. Carly went back to the door and locked it also at the same time Aisha closed the window blinds i was scared im not going to lie about it i nearly passed out but i relised then i couldnt stop whatever these two were about to do. I stood up and said "Ok before we do anything i have to pee." I just about ran for the small bathroom door conected to the room. I was in there maby for five or ten minutes trying to think of something to say or do. I finaly got the courage to leave the room and i opend the door and Carly and Aisha were sitting there naked making out with each other . As i said befor wasnt going to lie so honestly it was quite arousing but i still sprint to the doorvunlocked it and went back partying with friends only just away from that room. It was about midnie when we all left and most of us were drunk i had fun besides the whole Carly and Aisha thing *********** Hey thats my update so Comment Critizie and Folloew me i will updaye lated BYE for now
I like it,but proof read.Quite a few spelling and grammar mistakes.Also, I like long updates but if you're going to have them try using paragraphs.
update ******* Its been a week or two since the party and schools been ok besides that some of the kids at school decided i needed to be picked on so just yesterday one of them slamed my head into a locker and jeez did it hurt. But its still all average exept for puperty that sucks as well my voice is breaking and alot of other stuff that i dont need to mention but worst of all my aunti died that makes four family deaths this year. But during the past week a remarkably good thing happend i was walking home and i saw my old crush from the school i went to previously she asked me to walk with her so i did she was astonished to see newly dried blood on my nose bruses on my arms and my black eye she felt sorry for me thats the only reason i could think she was talking to me i mean look at me i have medium lengethed brown hair brown eyes i am tall and thin and allround an ok complection i wasnt veary physicaly strong but i could bring a grown man to tears with words. This scared me so i constantly made sure that i said nothing offending or rude even to my bullies. My old crush gave me her number and told me to call her so im sitting here thinking should i or shouldnt i
Story lines okay but you're writing kinda needs some improvements...(No offence.) •Paragraphs. •Correct spelling. •Only use slang in dialogue, not narration. •Use punctuation!Theres no full stops so if you read it out loud... •Use a variety of words, maybe look in a dictionary or something.