If only I knew wrong. If ONLy I could hold on without even falling off. Thought I was in the balance once!n for all. But then again - I WAS WRONG. I MADE MYSELF FALL. fell asleep, On the edge of a cloud Slipped, fell off. Bound to the ground. Fell into a deeper sleep. Like a drop of water filled with a dream. A sun ray transformed into a drip of rain. I LET GO! Now I have to face the pain. I am conscious of my selfishness. I AM ASHAMED. OH, MY GOD, please don't let my existence be invane.
As a song writer to another, it was alright. I'm not saying it was horrible because it definitely wasn't. A good tip is to organize it by: •First Verse •Chorus •Second Verse •Bridge And so on. Also, I really liked how you used caps for exaggeration.
Nice, well it seems like a draft of an actual song so it's good. Not formatted correctly, but that's okay. It just seems good for you, because it obviously holds it's meaning for you. I would agree with the first comment on alright. =)
Wow I cant write a song!My songs are like this I've been holding on so very tight I killed want to let go because I know I'll hurt you righ! I don't wanna go let go off you! Im awful!!!