Okay I'm updating cuz I finally am over writers block yay!!! Aliza's P.O.V ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ She closed her locker and gasped when it reveled a terrifying monster " Hey Zay just wanted to make a few things clear." Melissa purred " What?" She put her books in one hand and shifted her wait to one side already bored with the conversation. " that you should stay the same loser girl you were, sure you are like the most unknown person here but I think that was for the better." " Afraid I might take away your guy Mel." Aliza smirked at the nerdy nickname Melissa had had in kindergarten. Melissa glared " No one calls me that freak!" She pushed her, Aliza's books going every where and her shoulder hurting where she had landed on it. Melissa looked at her and smiled. " Looks like your not all the tough." She reached down and smacked her making a loud crack. " Remember who's the boss in this school freak, okay." Aliza nodded trying not to cry from the pain throbbing in her cheek. Melissa was raising her hand to hot her again when a voice cleared, turning both of their heads " Melissa what the hell do you think your doing?" Kyle's voice rang out as he strode towards us from the end of the hall. " I was just teaching this loser who's in charge, gosh ky when did you start to care about the freaks well being." Aliza could tell Melissa had no idea that Kyle was upset. That made her smirk a little, was she about to get a wake up call. " Aliza is not a freak or a loser. You are so step the hell away from her now!" He picked Aliza up so she was standing and narrowed his eyes at Melissa. Melissa stood there her eyes wide and mouth opened taking small steps back. " you like her! Are you insane, I rule this school and this town and you defend her!" She was glaring at Aliza now " You are so going to get it, when pretty boy can't help you." With that she stalked off, her hips swaying but Kyle's attention was on her. " Are you okay? Do you need to go to the nurses office?" She shook her head. " I'm fine, thank you for saving me." She looked down but he tilted her head up to look him in the eyes. " I'll always save you." He smiled his gaze not wavering from hers. " Why?" Aliza was just saying words by then her mind dizzied by the intesty of his gaze. Then shaking her from her daze a voice called out. "And what do you think you too are doing?" ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Who is it!!! Guess y'all will have to wait and see
It's the teacher. My advice is to give more description and suspense. And punctuation. There are some grammar errors, ad it's confusing to read if there are a lot. Otherwise, it's very good!
Sshhhhhh don't give it away lol and I shall work on that grammar and me have an interesting relationship lol
Here's another update from the dream tag teamenjoy! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Kyle's POV: "What do you think you two are doing?" Aliza and I turned around at the sound of Daniel's voice. "What do you mean? We're not doing anything." I told him. He looked really pissed off. "Get your filthy hands off of her." Daniel said, his fists clenching. "Excuse me? I was just helping her. Besides, I don't see her complaining. I think someone's a little jealous." I said smirking. "I am not jealous, I just don't want you touching her. Aliza come on, I don't you near this guy anymore." Daniel said. Aliza's expression went from shocked to angry, and she raised an eyebrow. "Excuse me, but I don't know who you think you are. You can't tell me who I can and can't hang out with! God, the thing I hate the most is when people think they can control me! I'm very capable of deciding who I want to hang out with and who I don't want to hang out with. I don't need you to tell me that. Let's go Kyle." She glared at Daniel and then grabbed my hand. "Sure." I held her hand and we started to walk away. 'Here's my chance.' I thought. "Um Aliza, can I ask you something?" All of a sudden I was nervous. My heart beat faster and my mind raced. She looked up at me. "Sure Kyle, what is it?" She asked. I swallowed my fear and just asked her. "Will you go out with me?" I asked nervously. She glanced over at Daniel then smiled at me. "Yes, I would love to go out with you." she answered. "Really? Awesome!" I smiled back and my nervousness went away. She laughed and we walked away, leaving Daniel staring after us, his eyes wide and his mouth hanging open. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ What'd you guys think? Bet you didn't expect that did ya?