--Chapter 1-- We laughed. We hugged. We did everything together, yet none of it felt right. He leaned down to kiss me, it would be my first kiss ever... I moved. "Whats wrong?" he asked me curiously. "N-nothing Magnus." i stuttered back. His curious looked turned to a worried gaze. "Its nothing, I swear!" I tried to say honestly, but i couldn't. It was obvious that he liked me, possible loved but I didn't feel the same. "There is something!" he almost yelled stepping back. A few people around started to look at us. "Magnus, you're causing a scene." I said. He didn't care, just walked away. "F it. First you tried to turn me mortal and got yourself cursed and now this? No!" he shouted, then disappeared into a puff of smoke. People stared at me and I ran past them, out of the fair, and into the forest crying. Passing trees, logs, even a lake, I finally tripped and then sat back at the base of a tree. I pulled a knife out and ran it across my wrist. 'Sharp' i thought and did a small cut, blood ran out and a few drops hit the grass, i watched then went for another deeper one. Before i made contact with my wrist someone grabbed the knife right out of my hand. I looked up surprised. A guy was standing there with it in his hand. He has black emo hair and green eyes. "I'm Chaz. Don't cut. Its bad" he told me and set the knife down. "Who are you?" he asked me. "Cadence." i replied. His voice was deep. Suddenly his expression became stern. "What were you trying to accomplish with this knife?" I didn't know how to respond. I didn't know what i was trying to do. I just muttered "Suicide." he scowled at me. "Suicide? I doubt you have anything to kill yourself over. I had a wife and 2 kids, im standing here!" His voice sounded hurt remembering. No matter how hot he was, he was as straight as a pole so off limits. "Nothing like that" i said and he muttered "Exactly" and walked away. I sat there confused, thinking. "I am a man... I was so stupid thinking suicide was the option..." I smacked myself. "Idiot." i muttered and heard something. I pulled out my knife and stood up to face it... It wasn't Chaz it was someone else. He heard me. "Hai!" he said, way to cheery. Yup, hes gonna kill me. He walked over to me, a lot more muscular and maybe 5 inches taller. Dirty blonde hair and blue eyes that could take the breath out of anyone. "Well, you aren't very talkative. I saw you talking to straight-pole guy and knew you were new so i welcome thy!" He laughed. If hes my murderer, i wouldn't really mind. Hes hot, full of laughter and probably stra- did he call him Straight-pole guy? He's gay! I smiled and looked at him. "Why do you wanna kill yourself?" He asked very curious. "Well... um.. Im gay and nobody really... likes me." i said. He talked, the words seemed to slide out and he had to not think. All his words made sense. "Being gay is nothing to be ashamed of. Go up to those haters and show them who the hell is in charge!" He laughed. I did a small nod and stared at the ground. He touched my chin and softly moved it to make eye contact. "Don't end you're life because of others. I could bet anything they are just doing that because they are jealous." he told me. I didn't even know his name, yet i felt connected to him. Suddenly, I just leaned in a kissed him. He tensed... I could tell he was surprised. "Oh my god i can't believe i just did that. I'm so sorry!" I said backing up and tripped. He grabbed me before i fell, flashed a smile at me that just took my breath away and walked away. Who is he? Why do i feel like i know him? I asked myself questions... Suddenly it hit me, "I gave up my first kiss to a stranger, What if he had lip herpes or something!?!" I yelled outloud, not even meaning to. All of sudden i heard "I don't have lip herpes! That'd be disgusting." That remark made me laugh. I wouldn't kiss Magnus but a stranger?? Yeah he was hot but Magnus was... hansom. I felt disgusting... I haven't been single 5 minutes and I already kissed someone... the kiss had sparks though. I shook my head, maybe i just want someone there... i can't stand being alone.
--Chapter 2-- I woke up. "What happened yesterday?" I mumbled sitting up. I picked leaves out of my black hair and looks around. "Crap..." I said remembering yesterday. I left Magnus, kissed a stranger, and think I met my soul mate... I stood up looking around, my stomach grumbled. "Where are the towns here?" I asked myself and walked around. It must of taken at least 30 minutes to catch sight of one. I ran into it and found a bar. I took a seat at the counter and looked at the menu. A familiar laugh happened. "Well, I didn't know you were a bar person" the man said. I looked up and my face flushed. The bartender was the stranger I kissed. "Someones shy" he muttered. "Hi..." I said, hiding the excitement. I can finally know who he is! "I'm Kuyeo, and I shall be your waiter/bartender today. May I start you off with something?" he said. I told him what I wanted, and he got it faster than the other orders, I was watching. He smiled and talked to me. "Do you have a boyfriend?" he suddenly asked. I shook my head and took a bite of my sandwich. "Well, want to meet me here after my shift is done?" he asked. I nodded excitedly. Suddenly, his boss came out screaming at him in... Japanese i think and he squeaked and moved back looking down. His boss gave him a disgusted look and walked out. "Well, I don't have to wait until the end of my shift since I just got fired." he said and did a somewhat forced laugh. "Yes!!!" I said, a bit too excited. He laughed and hopped over the counter. "Where to?" he asked. I didn't know, so i said "To my cave?" He thought of it dirty, I could tell by his facial expression but I wasn't meaning that. Just get to know him a bit.
I find killing yourself over something as ridiculous as getting rejected or simply being gay is a tad bit far. It's unrealistic, and although I'm not saying all stories should be like this, it makes yours seem rush and makes it look like an abomination, in a non-offensive way. The plot's okay, but I suggest that you don't immediately rush to throw in random characters in different settings and then describe them at the first chance you get. Character development is crucial, and simply stating their looks and whatnot and then making them walk away also makes your story seemed rush. Capitalize your 'I's, too. A few grammar mistakes such as run on sentences, but that's probably it. That's my criticism to you. :>
Haha thanks Goldialocks Cadence over reacts about a lot of things so that's why I made that a bit rushed.
--Chapter 3-- We finally got to my cave, he looked around seeing the random stuff. To be honest I was hoping to find a cave, none of this stuff was mine and I literally just found it. "Sooo, what do you like?" he asked to break the silence. I told him about me and eventually we lied down, laughing and just talking. He was totally honest with me saying he use to be a player but wants to take it slow with me. It was a shock how he just said it. I smiled, believing him. I know it's stupid to trust a stranger but he seems so convincing. After an hour or so of talking we just lied there, next to each other staring at the roof of the cave. He turned and smiled at me. "This was fun. I guess I gotta go before I get too tired and end up staying the night here." he said and laughed. "I wouldn't mind if you stayed here..." I mumbled. He did a small nod, horrible at hiding his happiness. He looked at me, didn't say anything but we just made eye contact for a few minutes before saying anything out loud, almost like we were talking mentally. I finally broke the eye contact and looks up at the cave ceiling again. From the corner of my eye I saw his softly close falling asleep. I replayed the day in my head then rolled over going to sleep, too.
~Kuyeo Point of View (POV)~ I woke up before Cadence. I looked at him before I sat up. He looked so calm, so peaceful and beautiful in his sleep. Smiling I stood up, since he let me stay the night I shall make him breakfast. I slipped out of the cave going to collect berries and other eatable things of the forest. I won't kill an animal but I'd buy the meat. Seeing it die is just too much for me. I looked around and found a raspberry bush. I picked some, and walked around looking for a new fruit to pick. "Hello." I heard a voice say. I turned around, there was a guy around 17 standing there staring at me. He had blue-ish hair and bright blue eyes. He was possibly 2 inches shorter than me. "Hello, I don't think I've seen you before" I said. By his tone he doesn't seem to like me but he doesn't look like a bad guy, so I best not try to make him mad. "Well, that's sad because I know you. You are the one my ex came crying to! Was he cheating on me with you?" He said, very harsh I might add. "Wha- no! I didn't meet him before 2 days ago!" I said. It is actually pretty funny, a guy who is dressed in a sparkles being vicious to a guy who could easily crush anything in his hands. "Liar!" He hissed and threw something at me. I ignored it, quickly catching and throwing it at least 500 feet away, being superhuman has its advantages. "Stay away from Cadence. Don't look about him. Don't think about him. Don't breathe the same air as him! I mean it." The guy said. "Well, wouldn't me not breathing the same air as him made me have to die?" I asked. Stupid, I know, but cadence is so sweet. That black boyish hair and green eyes just makes me smile at the thought. "I don't care if you have to kill yourself. One hour to say goodbye. Tell him "Magnus is looking for him." Got it?" He said. I did a nod. He threw a bag at me... Full of berries? I sighed knowing I'll have to make one damn good excuse to leave, and maybe trick myself.
Cadence POV: I woke up and no one was there. I looked around the cave and he was gone. I sighed. It figures he left. No one ever loves me enough to stay. "Heyyy" a familiar voice said. I looked up and there was Kuyeo walking in carrying a bag of berries. "I got berries for breakfast!" He stated. I nodded, surprised he came back. "Did you think I left?" He said, giving me a confused look. "A bit..." I mumbled. He laughed and just tossed me the berries. I smiled and ate one. "Want one?" I offered. He shook his head and started to brush up where he slept last night and his clothes, almost like he was planning to leave... Was he? (Sorry for short update!)
Magnus POV: I watched them invisible using a spell. Kuyeo tried to be distant but I could tell in his eyes all he wanted to do is hug Cadence. Cadence was catching onto his suspicious behavior and I'm almost positive he will ask him about it. Kuyeo cleaned up wherever he had touched, practically removing all fingerprints. He was doing good so far, but that won't keep up for long. "I will await the waterworks" I mumbled to myself. Cadence looked in my direction, I felt like he could see me but he can't... Well I hope he can't. If he can then this will turn awkward very quickly. Kuyeo sat down by him and looked him directly in the eyes. He is going to tell him, I will get Cadence again. I smiled and started to listen. "Hey Cadence, can I tell you something?" Kuyeo said. Cadence did a excited nod and ate another berry. He is gonna tell him.!!! I almost squealed in excitement. "I think i might be falling in love with you..." Kuyeo said. "WHAT!" I yelled and became visible walking over. "I said never talk to him again, not declare possible love!" I yelled. Kuyeo squeaked and looked down, he really can't handle under pressure. Cadence looked at me. "MAGNUS! GET OUT OF HERE! I'd rather have Kuyeo than you! He actually listens and doesn't zone out!" Cadence raged and continued about all of my mistakes I made in our relationship. I listened to this list.... It sounds like I'm a horrible horrible person. Then I wondered, am I? I can't be... Maybe cadence is really needy and I'm not good enough. "You zoned out again!" He yelled, very frustrated might I add. "I sound like a horrible person... And I am..." I mumbled and walked out.
Kuyeo's POV: I stood there and watched, very very awkwardly. Cadence released all his feelings towards Magnus at once, comparing me to him. They way he worded it I sounded perfect. Magnus muttered something and walked out. Cadence stood there, looking like he might burst out into another screaming scene. "Cadence..." I said softly. He fell backwards and I caught him and softly laid him down. He was breathing so that was good and I shook him softly. He sat up immediately, almost bumping my head. "Are you okay?" I asked. "Yes but I can't believe I just did that..." He said. I nodded. "Want me to go see if Magnus is alright?" I asked. He did a small nod and lied back down. I stood and jogged in the direction Magnus disappeared to. "Magnus...?" I called out. "Yes?" A muffled voice replied from a bush. I looked behind the bush and there he was. "Are you okay?" I asked. "Heart broken... Shouldn't you be in there comforting my boy?" He said. "Your boy?" I said with a very questioning tone. He nodded. "He will forever be my boy, not matter what you do to him. You'll probably break his heart though." He said. "Wow thanks. I came out here to see if you were alright and now you're hating on me. I can just leave you here to cry alone if you'd rather" I said. He shook his head, defiantly not wanting to be alone. He looked behind me, and I turned too. In the cave entrance there was Cadence, laying there, passed out, in a puddle of blood holding a knife.