How on earth?

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Orisel (01), Sep 28, 2012.

  1. As you may know, there has been rumours of life after death as a well 'undead' like a ghost or a zombie. This story will be about a boy who meets an 'undead' hope you enjoy. It will be in a POV of that boy. His name is Drake.
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    "Hello," I said.
    (Whisper whisper)
    "Who Is there, don't hurt me."
    "where am I?" she said
    I woke up, sweating like usual.
    "Drakey?, you screamed last night so I got scared" said Sam, my little sister
    "Sammy, I'm fine..."
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    I walked around the forest, wondering what on earth my dream was about. I then saw something over near a tree. I walked over. It was a mirror. Putting my hand on the rim, it went through the mirror-ish object. Stepping through the thing, I was instantly in a ghost room. Ghosts flying about everywhere. One of them came over and said to me,
    "Help, they are destroying us!"
    I looked around, seeing ghosts screaming and running around.
    "CALM DOWN!" I screamed.
    Everyone stopped and looked at me. Or looking through me of that's what they do.
    "Will someone explain what is going on?"
    I felt the sudden urge to turn back and run home. Even if I tried, the guilt would kill me.
    "The human scientists have found a way to get into here and kill us all in one bullet!" panicked one of the lady spirits.
    "What can I do?" I worried
    "Hmm, a human can do a lot of things which us ghosts cannot, it is terrible how this has happened to us but... Muttered the ghost of Albert Einstein








    This looks long but it's nothing 
     
  2. Why do I leave this on cliffhanger.... Im stuck. Anyone wanna help?
     
  3. A cliffhanger...maybe have them about to tell him how to save them and then have something dramatic happen, or like some else steps through the mirror and their a bad person. Just a suggestion 
     
  4. Thanks  I'll see what I can do...