Haley, was a short girl and is my best friend I will be telling her story in the best way but of course I will be changes names around so I don't give out to much info. This is about her and her bf fist kiss hope you like it. Haley looked lost at her new school, didn't really know a soul. She passed the the different halls in search of her classes and ran into a boy who will later be her husband. He was a tall thin boy with Ashy black hair and golden brown eyes. She looked away shyly blushing as he touched her face. She smile and connected with his eyes and said nothing. Silent voices broke through the glass into the shattering notice of the bells she then looked at the ground gathering her books and ran to her destiny. He turned and watched as Haley waved good bye.. The next day after 3rd period she saw the same ashy black haired boy from the day before standing by her locker talking to his friends. As Haley walks up the boys begin to scatter leaving only one. He looks at her and says "my name is christopher but, call me Chris" Haley nods and says hello. Chris listen to Haley soft sweet voice and laughs as her southern voice wraps in kindness. He slowly slides in to kiss Haley but, Haley was already a step ahead she kissed Chris better then any boy before. From the view I had you'd say their passion was causing fireworks and sparks. Their arms and hands met as adding more wood to a burning fire. The passion filled the halls of the school. No one expected the two to love each other but now there happily married
You need to work on your spelling, grammar, capitalization and punctuation. There's a bunch of mistakes, but proofreading it a few times will help with that. Try to space out the action more, make it happen more slowly. It seems kind of rushed now.