the forgotten

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *_Whateva_ (01), Sep 14, 2012.

  1. No one knows the forgotten because well she's forgotten she met a guy the guy dumped her no she roams helplessly in the middle of nowhere can anyone help her? No!
     
  2. Try to use lots more detail, and write longer updates. I can't see where the story is going yet:)
     
  3. And she sings really depressing songs for example "this lies are leading me astray it's to much for me to stay I don't wanna live this destiny it goes on endlessly" she kills wolfs with her bear hands all she does is walk and eat no sleep
     
  4. *wolves
    *bare

    Use punctuation, grammar, capitalization, and write with a LOT more detail. We need to be able to picture the scene in our head, and I can't exactly do that. Please don't take this as insults… I'm trying to improve your writing.
     
  5. Oh are u my teacher I'm sorry mr.shualck
     
  6. That's criticism. This is not a story. Far fucking from it, actually.

    Please stop spamming forums with useless crap. :|