11 year old Gabby lies alone in her bed, when she hears the front door burst open. Her father yells "Gabby I'm home!" he walks slowly upstairs shouting "Gabby come out here RIGHT NOW!!" Gabby pulls her blanket to her tight in fear. The door to her room bursts open the view of her father staring at her, the smell of booze instantly filling the air. "hello gabby" He says with and evil smile. he walks towards her unbuttoning his shirt. Gabby shuts her eyes and pulls the blanket tighter saying to her self "please make the monster go away" over and over again.
Wow. I really need to get into the swing of editing (/.-) I missed so many mistakes! Punctuation, capital letters at the beginning of speech... Tristan you need to write more so I can practice.
The next day Gabby gets up slowly from her bed, her entire body sore and aching. She looks around the her small room with grey walls, a poster of a kitty cat on the wall and a picture of her mother on the tan dresser. She walks over to it slowly and looks at the picture. She remembers 3 years ago when her father came home crying, saying her mother had been in an accident. At the time Gabby didn't really know her mother, because when Gabby was five her mother became addicted to "sugar". There was always sugar on her nose and in baggies around the house. So her daddy sent her to a place to help. Gabby wasn't allowed to go see her mommy in this place, but daddy went every day. So when daddy came home three years ago crying, Gabby didn't shed a tear. She didn't know her mommy, but that's when her daddy started drinking. After a little while he started to come up stairs while Gabby was in bed. Gabby hated her father so much. She just wished someone would help her... The angel Gabriel stands in the library reading his book. The door opens and death enters, dragging his scythe slowly across the floor.
Gabby slowly creeps down stairs. Cautiously, she looks into the living room. Her father is passed out on the couch. She pulls her back pack the rest of the way off and steps slowly into the living room. She sneaks half way across the room when she accidentally kicks a beer bottle. Her father jumps at the sound and he looks across the room, staring evilly at a terrified Gabby. Gabriel sits down at a table and reads his book. Death swings his scythe and it stabs in to the paper. "Gabriel you aren't listening? I don't want to kill people any more! I've had enough!!" death yells loudly. Gabriel looks up at him, unfazed. "Well that's too bad. You are death, it's your job. Now go and do it before god gets mad." Gabriel says decisively. Death swears under his breath and leaves. Gabby screams and runs for the door. Her father grabs a beer bottle and throws it at her. It shatters and pieces lodge into her leg. Gabby falls onto the ground in pain. Her father walks across the room and stands over her, angry. very angry.
Gabby stares up at her father in fear when he suddenly grips his chest. Gabby watches as her father stumbles back. He slips on a beer bottle and crashes to the ground. She watches as a man walks from the shadows and looks at her father. The man has dark grey skin which is covered in scars. Long black hair covers his face. He pulls the long scythe off of his back and stabs it into gabby's father. "As the body dies the soul is released and it shall come forth!" Gabby sees her father come out of his body now glowing blue. He stares at death with fear in his eyes. "Who are you? What are you going to do with me?" He says, his voice shaking. "I am death, and you sir, are going to hell." Death swipes his scythe across the soul before he has to hear it complain. Gabby doesn't shed a single tear for her deceased father. She stands up, walks over, and hugs death. Who only now notices she's in the room. "Thank you for saving me. You are a hero mr. Death." She says, burying her face into him as she hugs him tight. Death stares at her in surprise. "You.....you don't hate me..." Death says slowly.