Revenge Of The Cold Hearted

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by -PA_Veronica-, Aug 23, 2012.

  1. I need more readers
     
  2. Wow this is good! bump!
     
  3. Nobody's reading should I even bother
     
  4. , IM READING!! keep going!!!
     
  5. V!! Ur awesome at writing! I rly like the story! And It wld be such a hit book!!
     
  6. thanks guys ill update soon it's just school started and I haven't had time
     
  7. UPDATE:
    Hope u like it
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    Tears threaten to fall down my face, but I held them back. Come on Chels be strong you need to remain strong for your mother.

    "Why would you kill my mother? What did she do to you?" I glared at him showing no fear. I felt the anger boiling up inside me.

    "Well your mother Sarah was Working with supernatural beings such as you," he looked at me with cold eyes. "She was trying to get rid of all the crime in Cali, but no I couldn't have that. So I killed her," he shrugged. "you should've heard her cries of pain, she wouldn't give up I gave her a chance. But she didn't take it she was a good lady and a very fine looking one at that," he smirked.

    "You sick bastard," while he was telling his story my stomach was flipping and my emotions of pain, sadness, and anger mixed together and became fury.

    "But I can't take all the credit I had a partner in crime," he smiled at me "Someone very close to you."

    "My mother was doing the right thing," I slapped the gun out of his hand and made a run for it. The tears came as I raced out of the building and into my car. I sped off to find a place to rest and calm myself before I called jack.

    After finding a motel I cleaned myself up and dyed my hair a light blonde with pink highlights. I showered and stepped out to look at the new me I smirked putting in my blue eyed contacts. okay Chelsea this is it you have to get the one thing that will give u peace, revenge.

    I called Jack the next morning.

    "Hello?"

    "Uh hey Jack it's me Chelsea I just found out that the mobster killed my mother..." I kept my voice steady "but he wasn't alone,"

    He sighed "Alright Chelsea great job meet me back at my place there's someone I want you to meet."

    I nod "Alright be there shortly," I hang up and get dressed. Who did he want me to meet?
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    What do u think? Good bad boring? Need more action? A twist?
     
  8. WHOSE THE MYSTERY PERSON!!!!!! GAHHH!!! >_< V YOUR KILLIN HERE!!!! UPDATE SOON!
     
  9. thanks darling
     
  10. I love it babe  it's sooo intresting and thrilling 
     
  11. Awesome!
     
  12. awe thanks baby
     
  13. Update
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    I patted down my long curly blonde hair letting it fall down my back, I slipped on a cut off shirt with booty shorts and high tops. Taking one last look at myself I applied cherry blood lipstick, I smiled satisfied I grabbed my purse and headed out to jacks place.

    who did Jack want me to meet? I thought. I pulled up to Jacks house and got out walking up the stone path to the cottage looking mansion, his house was surprisingly stunning. it was lined with Greek designed columns and a big fountain in the front yard, surrounded by purple lilies. I walked up to the glass door ringing the door bell, I waited patiently. The maid let me in and lead me to where Jack and a handsome man were sitting, my heart stopped. He was smoking hot he got up and walked to where I was standing sticking out his hand, I took it.

    "Hello Chelsea I'm Dylan, pleasure to meet u," he smiled flashing his pearly white teeth.

    I stared into his emerald green eyes my heart melting. "Pleasures all mine," I managed to steady my voice before I spoke. I let go of his hand walking over to Jack, as I did I felt Dylan's eyes staring at my body. I turned around quickly to catch him checking out my butt, I smirked. "Do you have a staring issue?"

    He smiled. "Only when it's a hot girl such as yourself," he looked away looking at Jack. "Am I really supposed to work with this chick?"

    My blood boiled and before I could stop myself, I pinned my foot to his throat. "I can't work with him he's weak," I smiled down at him.

    In a flash he had me on the floor laying on top of me he smirked "I think you look better in this position."

    I pushed him off getting up I glared at jack. "Really?"

    Jack laughed "You two are gonna work great together your both vampires with a motive to kill," he ushered us to sit.

    I sat on the couch making myself comfortable and Dylan sat beside me a little too close. He whispered "So there's this new club and I was wondering if a sexy girl like you would like to join me," he winked.

    I got up and sat in a different chair "You wish."

    "Dylan focus," jack laid out some papers on the table. "Okay we now know who killed Sarah, but as Chelsea found out there's someone else. We need to find the second person," jack studied the maps.

    "I also found out why he killed my mother, he said she was using vampires to help destroy the mobs," I looked at jack. "If you knew that why did you send me to the mobster?"

    Jack looked at me with caring eyes "It was training and I must say you did very well for the first time."

    "Chelsea did okay she's still a noob I could help her with training," Dylan said looking completely serious.

    I blushed trying to hide it. Come on Chels he's just a hot guy he's no different then anyone else you've been with "Thats a great idea," I heard myself say. I scolded myself what was I thinking?

    Dylan looked over and smiled sweetly. I smiled back completely dumbfounded.

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    What do you think? You like it? Hate it? Love it? Despise it? PLEASE TELL
     
  14. This is good! Bump! 
     
  15. CHELSEA GONNA GET A BOO!!!! AWWWW SHXT..... V UPDATE
     
  16. may don't bypass
     
  17. , i didnt bypass..... bypassing is when you are starting drama on someone's wall and you are calling them really bad names 