A lot of you said I need more detail well here a new story please read comment and Bump if enough ppl like it I'll post more thank you I wonder the halls, clinging to my books and my long jacket, watching nothing but the shapes of the cold long death I have before me. I feel the emptiness of my heart as I open the door to my classroom. I see the people growing silent as I walk in the room. I look at the evil smirk upon my teachers face. She was a dark head women with big black glasses and a long old timed black lace dress. I looked into her cold heartless eyes trying to not show my fear but on the inside I was shaking in my high tops. The teacher points to a chair and mumbles out her name. I slowly pace to my seat as a boy, bout 3 sizes bigger then me, kicks out his feet tripping me in the process. I fall face first into the dark floor panel. Shadows occur around me pointing and laughing. My mouth becomes dry as tears begin pouring from my untouched face. I look around me and see people. But not normal I sees blurs. I try to come to my feet but end up falling back down. I scream for help as the darkness surrounds me. I see nothing....
I'll be rewriting more on this account my other one got messed up but update soon! Lol and thanks for reading
Awesome job! My one piece of advice is to try to avoid repetition. You repeated the word I a lot of times in the middle. Bump!!! =)