The Death 

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Yak-JIU-LEAKY_JoposTutChrissy-, Aug 21, 2012.

  1. When I was a little girl they used to say death would sneak up ...I saw someone die the scream the blood the vivid image that can't disappear this happened ..the chills run down your back like you hear someone screaming
     
    #1 Yak-JIU-LEAKY_JoposTutChrissy-, Aug 21, 2012
  2. The you hearts beats like a drum Dom Dom Dom then the screams stop silence that's the scariest part -THE DEATH 
     
    #2 Yak-JIU-LEAKY_JoposTutChrissy-, Aug 21, 2012
  3. *then your heart
     
    #3 Yak-JIU-LEAKY_JoposTutChrissy-, Aug 21, 2012
  4. Paragraphs, details, think I few errors?

    But good start :3
     
    #4 DoneDeleted, Aug 21, 2012
  5. I know I was typing fast 
     
    #5 Yak-JIU-LEAKY_JoposTutChrissy-, Aug 21, 2012
  6. Thank u
     
    #6 Yak-JIU-LEAKY_JoposTutChrissy-, Aug 21, 2012
  7. Try to make longer updates. Nice job
     
    #7 FallenAngel12321, Aug 22, 2012
  8. BRITTTTTTTTTTTTTT
     
    #8 HopinOn, Aug 22, 2012
  9. Don't. Use. Emoji.
     
    #9 Goldialocks, Aug 22, 2012
  10. Pretty good start, but like they said said paragraphs,longer updates blah blah blah haha update
     
    #10 *Charlie-Bush (01), Aug 22, 2012
  11. Haha NINJAAAAA 
     
    #11 Yak-JIU-LEAKY_JoposTutChrissy-, Aug 22, 2012
  12. Thanks fallen and Charlie for the input
     
    #12 Yak-JIU-LEAKY_JoposTutChrissy-, Aug 22, 2012
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