Hello everyone I just decided to post this story that spranged out of my mind and I thought to give it a shot. Warning: English is not my native languange , so please bear with it . Thankyou .
-Flashback- 11 years ago (crying) They didn't make it. That's what my uncle said additionally saying, Dont cry Jake , men does not cry over these things. And I asked where is brother I thought he would be here with me I asked uncle. Oh your brother he went to Japan to study college, didn't you know? As I heard that my anger boiled and raged and with that painful angry feeling I ran away as fast as i could wanting to think that all of this is just one big nightmare through the hospital corridors having the air hit my face and then I tripped and started to cry. But then someone came to me, a short black hinted with slight pink tint hair came to me asking -are you crying?- I said :No! my uncle said not to cry and that men do not cry. It's okay , here is Teddy to help you feel better. And with that she left me, left me with a Teddy , as I looked at it, it gave me a feeling of happiness. A/N: sori for this but pls comment on what i need to improve . Please do tell what you think.
-end of flashback- Well that's what I remember the past 11 years I saw her and with that I never saw her again. Now this is the start of a story named Jake, Jake Miura. A raven black hair and goes to Konoha Highschool, one of the most prestige school in Japan. A popular A student the descendant and mayne the next heir of his uncle in Miura enterprises. And now this young boy's story will start. Jake's POV Pssst... Jake Huh? I muttered. I saw my teacher glaring at me under his white hospital mask that he had for a long time. Well ... Sir Miura? He sarcastically asked, is history of your own country is that boring? This is the 100 th time I catched you doing this inappropriate thing in class, sleeptalking, what an outrage. Causing the whole class to laugh except my friend who woke me up. Well then, as I was saying Mountain Fuji was abou--- . He was cutted off by a knock on the door. It was the principal, as the president if the class signalling to us to bow since it was like that. 'Good Morning everyone, this class will have a new transferee student, please come in Ms. Kim'. And with that I saw a brown longhaired girl with tinted pink hair that you can almost see. Woo and wows was heard from boys and death glares to be seen from girls. I was shocked that the principal escorted her here because new students are usually escoreted by plain teachers so I thought maybe she was a VIP to the principal and I was right. The pricipal continued, This is Ms. Kim Sakura, as you now she is the trendy celebrity in Japan and internationally across Asia and Europe. Then she said,' yo people. Earning comments like wow she's awesome ,she's cool, she's hot and why is a celebrity here?, it just made me yawn at here statement and I thought she's not a big deal and just a person. As the principal ended With his praises to her , he said take care of miss Kim everyone! And he heard students saying certainly yes sir an then he trotted away like happy man pissing his pants. Well, Ms,Kim you can sit there beside Jake , he pointed to the empty sit beside me. As she walk up to the sit she asked, is someone sitting here? And I sarcastically said,'well it's obviously my books are sitting there. And she said ' oh, well now they don't! She pushed the books to my face earning a laugh from guys and deathglare from girls. And I thought ( ooh so fiesty we will see about that attitude if hers if she's here to stay. And there i chuckled , don't be cocky just because your a celebrity you think that I also like you well hell NO! A/N: thank youeveryone and pls tell me what your thoughts are thankyou to everyone who read this.
It's good so far, but in dialogues please use quotation marks. Example: "Hello." A voice as serene as an angel spoke to me. Looking beside me, I see him. The person I've longed to see all my life... Jin. That was a fail. But please do it like that so it'd be easier to read!