Dj next time try to use more detail. (example, explain how he died with great detail, explain at the beginning of the story on how the characters look) overall I'd say it was a pretty good story
*sigh* it's been a while since I've updated and for that I'm sorry this story shall continue because of kiara she is my inspirational writing rock ^.^ so I hope this is good ._. lol hey it's 11:11! <3 anyways... ENJOY! Leslie was still shocked. It had been over a month but it felt like just yesterday that Jason had died. She started tear up again. She had to stop this and move on... As she made her way to school she bumped into Landon. At least there was still one good thing in her life! She reached up to kiss him but he pushed her away. Leslie gave him a confused look. "Babe, what's wrong?" Landon sighed. He had to tell Leslie. Enough time had passed by for her to know. "Leslie, you know I would never do anything to hurt you..." She nodded and he continued. "Leslie..." Landon took a deep breath. "I'm the reason your brother died..." SILENCE. Was this real? It couldn't be happening. Landon was supposed to be the one person she could count on.. and now he was the whole reason her life was falling apart? Leslie shook her head and fell to the ground. "We were fighting, throwing punches, and I got so pissed off at him. I pushed him down and his head hit the cement. I didn't know what to do so I just ran. I'm sorry!" She was in shock. Leslie couldn't even cry. There was no way she was hearing this... Leslie slowly got up and came closer to him. She glared at him. The anger building up in her couldn't be contained. She lifted up her hand and slapped Landon across the face with all the strength she had. In just a few seconds his face was red. "I don't want you anywhere near me..." Landon tried hugging her but she pushed him away. "GET THE HELL AWAY FROM ME!" Leslie ran back home as quickly as she could and locked the door. She took one of the kitchen knives and went upstairs to her room. She kept pacing back and forth.. she couldn't help it, she was freaking out. This all seemed unreal. Leslie got on her knees and poured all her feelings out. She was sobbing uncontrollably. She felt so helpless. Her boyfriend had killed her own brother. She tried to shake away the thought, but she couldn't. Leslie took a deep breath and took a quick glance at the knife. Maybe there was one way she could be happy again... She looked up at the ceiling and then at the knife again. She brought the knife to her wrist and started cutting herself. Immediately blood started pouring out and dripping onto the carpet. Leslie looked up at the ceiling again. "See you soon, Jason..." All she could do was smile. uhmm ! I can't tell if this is short or not ._. anyways I really love you guys for keeping me on the 1st pg lol ... recommend this story to other people?? please? anyways give advice critiques and comments lol <3 THANK KIARA lol and read both of her stories (; "I'm just the shy invisible girl" and her other new one ^.^ thank you <3 DJ
Omg this was good! And yay I'm glad I could help! Keep it up and if you have anymore trouble writing just let me know!
Bump! I went looking for this! DJ please update!! You had a surprise remember? It was a secret! Even I don't know about it and I'm dying to know! >.< so please write soon!