prisoner (Again lol)

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by partyhouse01, Aug 16, 2012.

  1. Hey everyone
    I know I've already posted this before, but it seems like posting entire chapters at once, puts people off.
    So the reason I'm re-posting this is because I'm hoping that if I post it a bit at a time, people might be more willing to check it out.
    Anyway, here's the first page of the first chapter. Enjoy! :)

    Light that grows within eternal darkness
    Chapter 1
    Prisoner

    The twelve year old boy known as Tiger, slowly began to stand and as he did his strong and compact muscles tensed. His short black hair moved through the air as every cell in his body admitted a deadly and almost demonic aura.

    His emotionless black eyes scanned the nothingness that surrounded him. He turned to his right, then to his left, but all he could see was darkness. I’m dreaming again. He thought to himself in relief.

    The boy had long ago lost count of the countless times he had had this dream of nothingness. A dream that once long ago disturbed him had now become comforting to him.

    The dark nothingness of the dream had become comforting to him to such a degree, that before he knew it. He found himself craving the emptiness of this dream.

    This one dream had become he’s only refuge from the things that haunted him, it had become the only place where he could forget his troubles, his burdens, his brothers but most of all, the fragments of his horrific memories.

    He slowly closed his eyes as he paused for a moment and listened to the silence, a beautiful silence, no screaming, no crying, no begging, just pure and meaningless silence. His eyes slowly opened but this time they were flooded by emotions.

    Many emotions passed over him, but only one remained and that was his misery. His handsome yet roguish face was warped in anguish as hot water gathered at his eyes. The boy looked down at the nothingness he stood upon and looked at his own reflection.

    “How long till I’m crushed by this weight, this crushing burden” he said out loud to his own reflection, as pain and heat sudden spread threw out and attacked his entire body. He shook fiercely as he felt his heart twist and break, smacking his right hand over his chest in pain.


    “I’m... pathetic” he said as a silent and pain filled tear slowly slide down his cheek all the way down to he’s jaw, until it finally dropped and vanished into the darkness that existed under his feet. The darkness began to ripple as if it were water that had been disturbed by his tear.

    The boy froze as the darkness once again stayed still under him, but this time revelling something he had never seen before. Replacing his reflection was a dark and almost demonic shadow that now looked up at him.

    The boy’s heart began to race as an evilly twisted smile began to spread over the shadows face. The boy shivered in his tracks as he looked upon its maddening grin. “Who are you?” he asked just before a horrific feeling invaded his heart.

    Suddenly words began to materialise over the shadow, he watched as they materialise word after word until finely it was done. “I am the real you” those were the words the young boy had read out loud to himself, right before the shadows smile grew larger and even more maddening.

    In an instant, the shadows arm reached out from the darkness and enveloped his entire right leg, right before pulling him into the cold and ever consuming void of darkness that once only surrounded him, but now consumed him.

    Well that's page 1/4 of chapter 1/5
    Hope you enjoyed! :)
     
  2. Awesome job! Bump!
     
  3. Thank you fallen angel!