The Boy That Killed my Family

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by -DancingQueen-, Aug 14, 2012.

  1. Hi!  This will be the first story I've ever posted so be nice and enjoy. The character Caleb is my brothers name and Joys my middle name  let the story BEGIN!
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    The boy who killed my family

    Caleb stood over Joy's limp, dying body with a bloody dagger in his right hand. His whole body was covered in her blood. He knelt next to her and kissed her forehead. Caleb wiped his blood covered dagger on his pant leg and whispered,"So we meet again Joy. Why, you've gotten so beautiful and grown up! That's to bad, I miss those times when we played together as children without a care in the world," His voice rose." You know, before you betrayed me. Now let's see what we can do about that pretty face of yours.. Shall we? Or I can just reconstruct your whole body. Let's do that, how's that sound darling?" The way he said darling would make a grown man shake with fear
    Caleb started to trace the shape of her pale pink lips with his dagger. Leaving behind a bloody trail of red. The he worked his way up her face to the curve of her nose. All the way around her once beautiful aqua colored eyes. Then glides his weapon over to her bronzey brown color hairline. Blood was gushing from her skull for, she was barely hanging on. Then he skipped down to her neck drawing a straight line from her neck down to each of her legs. Joy made no attempt to plead, wince or show any emotion for that matter. She just laid there staring him down.
    The giant pool of blood she was in the middle of was dangerously getting deeper. Joys face was becoming quite pale. In a matter of minutes she would die of blood loss. If it weren't for him...
     
  2.  my paragraphs didn't show!!
     
  3. Soo... Bloody..... So..... Emo..... So..... Violent...... I LOVE IT! BUMPDATE NAOW!!!!
     
  4. Aw fank yew  lol
     
  5. 
    I love you.
     
  6. Effin awesome  y'all better have some fighting 
     
  7. Great start! You should double space the paragraphs, so it's easier to read:)
     
  8. ,_, read the book that entitles of the worst wars ever. That think has like 10,000 pages.
    Bump.
     
  9. I don't know what I'm going to do for the next update  but don't worry it will be out soon
     
  10. This story is so... Bloody.

    Remember the paragraphs.
     
  11. There's never enough blood haha. So I'll try to update by tomorrow afternoon hopefully sooner
     
  12. Lost my notebook with part of the story in it SORRY.
     
  13. I say just use the notes app
     
  14. Bumpdate-You have the Bumpdate seal of Approval
     
  15. Bump

    This story is great
     
  16. It's awesome:)
     
  17. Oh my god I forgot about this  I'm all out of ideas on what to write sorry!! So if anyone wants to collab with me, please do.
    -Kendra
     
  18. Wow, just wow!! this story is amazingly bloody lol. Usually I don't like stuff like that but this is fantastic. BUMP NOW