Love Lives

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Meiqing (01), Aug 13, 2012.

  1. Meiqing's Part

    There once were these two bestest friends. They've known each other since they could remember. They always told each other everything: from family problems to love lives. Everyone knew they'd be friends till the end of time. But no one would've guessed that something as simple as a little crush would break the friendship bond they've always had.
     
  2. Allie's pov
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    I woke up got dressed and walked down stairs i ate breakfast and walked to my friends house i knocked on the door i found some news i need to tell you im movim do a dif school and im gonna miss you!!
     
  3. Meiqing's pov
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    It's in the morning. Mom's yelling at me to get up
     
  4. Whoa y does this keep happening to me?!?! It cuts me off
     
  5. Meiqing's pov
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    I open the door to find my beat friend waiting out side patiently to tell me the big news. "What?!?!?! You're moving?!?!?! Since when?"
     
  6. Grammar, punctuation, detail and longer paragraphs. Work on these things and you'll be good.
     
  7. Sry it my part was split up. It wud've looked like a para if it were together
     
  8. Allies pov
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    Ill text u and all that i close the door and walk to the new school with my parents When i walk in the school i
    bump into this boy and fall to the ground i look and see this boy with blonde hair and beautiful brown eyes and a nice body
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    Jakes Pov
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    I was walkin to class and i bumped into this beautiful gurl with long blonde hair beautiful brown eyes a nive skinny body and a nice tan
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    Sorry it was bad im new with all this!!!
     
  9. Bump it sounds interesting
     
  10. This Is very interesting. Update or
    MeBumpdate
    Bumpdate's gonna kill me! Hurry'
     
  11. You need to do It like this;
    Jake's Pov (without the italics)
    Then the stuff you want in the Pov I know this isn't really stuff in a Pov but it's just an indicator

    Same thing with the girl

    Allie's Pov <without the italics>
    Stuff in Pov



    Other wise they end up looking like this:

    Allies Pov

    Stuff in it


    Jakes Pov

    Stuff in it



    Or

    Alexandras Pov
    Stuff in it

    Jamess Pov
    Stuff in it



    Correct: [Name's pov]
    Sorry but it just looks messed up when you don't do an '
     
  12. Allie's Pov
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    I look at him while he gets up I-I am so sorry hes puts his hand out and pulls me up he says hi my name is Jake i look at him shyly and say my name is Allie!!!



    Jakes Pov
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    I see this girl look at me and i get up and put my hand out thinkin she so cute and i feel her warm hand grab mine i pull her up and say my name is jake she looks t me shyly and says her name is Allie
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  13. I don't see the difference
     
  14. Parenthases and order your details!
     
  15. Ughh this is confusin im gonna give lol
     
  16. Meiqing's pov
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    "ok have fun @ ur new school." I end up going to school w/out seeing my best friend. Feels a bit empty but we'll always see each other again. I'm on my way to my job at the local smoothie shop. While I'm there I was too busy thinking about when we'll meet again that I barely notice the customer in front of me
     
  17. Don't, this story is amazing! Well the five seconds you've givven us so far anyway....
     
  18. I draw the line! Write out the words! Don't abreviate!