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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Nikolette, Aug 6, 2012.

  1. The bass was booming. The whole building was shaking as the techno music played at a club called Envy.
    My friend Ashley and I are on our summer vacation so we decided we would go out and party because next year is our senior year. The club was in the center of town, and of course we have our fake ID's with us.
    " Um, can I get a Long Island Ice Tea please, thanks," I asked as I watch Ashley go off and dance with all the people. Dang, I wish I was like her and could just do that all the time. I'm too chicken to do that kind of stuff. She has always been the partier and I have been the quiet one. This is the first night club I've been to if you can believe it.
    " Here you are," the bartender says.
    I pick up the drink and take a sip. It's not that bad, so I drink more.
    " Hey take it easy, those are pretty strong," someone says. I turn around on the barstool and there is the sexyiest guy alive next to me. He has light brown hair, beautiful emerald eyes, and he is very well built.
    " Oh, ok, thanks, I've never had one before, I didn't know it was really strong," I say, breathe taken away.
    " No problem, and I'm Damon by the way," he says, putting his hand out.
    " Rose," I say and blush a little, shaking his hand, which was very warm and made me feel safe.
    " That's a nice name, why aren't you dancing Rose?"he asks.
    " Oh, I d-don't dance much, I'm not very good," I answer as I tuck my bangs behind my ear.
    " I bet you can and you've just never tried," he says, smirking and holding out his hand, waiting for mine.
    " I don't know, I don't thi-"
    " Trust me, you'll be fine," he smiles and I surrender, giving him my hand and putting down my drink," It'll be fun, I promise."
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    As we get onto the dance floor, the song changes. Damon grabs both my hands and starts dancing.
    " Just watch me move," he says as I stumble around after him.
    " Okay, I'll try," I reply, wary.
    As I start following his feet, I start to figure out that it's not hard at all.
    " See I told you!" he shouts over the music.
    It's not that hard really, just swing your hips and do something fun with your hands. I get really into it and I am elated. I turn around to dance one way though, and by the time I turn back around, Damon is gone.
     
  2. Dang it, it screwed up my spaces, anyways, I think this is my 2nd story but technically the other one didn't count bc it was so long ago and I never finished, oh well, hope you guys like
     
  3. Bump! Good start!
     
  4. Nice! Remember the spaces! 
     
  5. Saturday morning I wake up and go downstairs. I feel so groggy from last night. Thankfully Ashley was able to um, legally drive last night. I don't know where Damon went. One minute he was there, the next he was gone. Strange. I looked for him too, and it was like he disappeared. I grab some cereal and milk and have some breakfast. I text Ashley to see if she's up yet but I get no response.
    Oh well. I was going to see if she wanted to go to a the beach but I guess I'll go alone.
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    I walk to a nice beach not far from my house. It's so beautiful, the sun reflecting across the water. I used to come to the beach all the time to relax. I now remember why. It's so peaceful, it's a place where you can get away from everything, to be free from the stress in your life and see what you have been missing for so long. I lay out my towel in a good spot and just lay down, soaking in the sun. The sounds of the ocean, the birds, the breeze, it's just so perfect. There are only a few other people on the this beach, one is jogging and the other is a couple. I've never been in a relationship. Ashley has told me so many times that I should date but I just haven't felt the need to yet. My mom used to take me to the beach when I was younger. I made sand castles a lot and my mom would help me. I wish I was younger again and mom still had time for me.
    I started to build a castle while my mind wandered in the past. I even put a moat around it. As I was putting the last touch ups to it, a shadow fell over it. I looked up and it was Damon. He was so gorgeous, mesmerizing even. His eyes sparkled as the ocean danced in them.
    " Hi," I say, squinting in the bright sun.
    " Hey what's up?" he says flashing me a smile.
    " Just relaxing and building a sandcastle."
    " Oh that's fun, mind if I make one?"
    " Go for it," I answer but by the time I say it, he's already making one. He makes one bigger than mine though, you could almost sit in it. He builds a huge moat around his but he leaves a walkway from my castle to his. It didn't take him long to finish, but it wasn't that bad, aside from the fact that it was lumpy, but it was still big.
    " Have you been swimming yet?" he asks.
    " No not yet, it was kind of cold."
    " Come on don't be a wuss, let's go jump in!" He grabs my hand and runs us over to the water. I immediately stop when my feet hit the water.
    " Whats wrong?"
    " It's too cold!" I yell, dancing in the sand. That wasn't my smartest move because the next thing I know, I'm being picked up like a doll and thrown into the water. When I come up to the surface, I take a gulp of water and spit it at Damon. He splashes me back and then disappears underwater. He pops up behind me and he pokes me in my sides.
    " Hey!" I shout, surprised. I follow him underwater and poke him this time.
    " Ooo, now your going to get it," he says with a smirk and disappears again. He reappears in front of me and does the unimaginable, he kisses me. It's only on the cheek but it wasn't enough for me. He disappears and my cheeks start to burn, they are probably beet red. I see where he is underwater and follow him. As I come up for breathe he turns around and I tackle him, closing my eyes and kissing him on the lips, hungry for the real thing. He kisses back and his kiss was so gentle, like a feather. I opened my eyes and find him leaving.
    " Wait, where are you going?"
    " It's complicated, see you later!" he says as he waves goodbye. He goes to the parking lot so I follow him. He turns a corner and by the time I get there, he's gone.
    " He is either really weird or I have completely lost it," I think, shaking my head.
     
  6. Can someone tell me why it won't show the spaces for tabbing, I put like 5 spaces before the start of each paragraph?
     
  7. Idk it always does that for me. Remember to double space your paragraphs, it's easier to read that way. Otherwise, it's amazing!!! 
     
  8. Great story so far but remember to put paragraphs.
     
  9. Update time! But it's kind of short, sorry

    In the morning I wake up, still thinking of Damon. I wish I could text him. I'll have to ask him for his number and an answer him why he keeps on disappearing so suddenly. Maybe I should go looking for him today. I text Ashley to see if she wants to go clubbing again. She says yes and I tell her that I need to find someone that I met the other night.
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    Ashley picks me up at my house and we drive to the club. We head inside and it's like we never left. I go to the bar first, order Cola and keep on the look out for Damon. I feel silly knowing he probably isn't here and I shouldn't get my hopes up. I see a guy that looks like Damon, so I go over and tap him on the shoulder.

    " Damon?" I ask.The man turns around and it's not Damon. I feel so stupid.
    " Hey pretty girl, looking for someone," he says, grabbing me and taking me out the back exit of the club.
    " Get your hands off me!" I scream hitting and kicking.
    " Not so fast honey," he says, pinning me down. I screamed and kicked while he took my jacket off. Then suddenly, the man was on the ground in a flash because something growled and attacked him. Whatever it was, it looked me in the eyes and ran off.

    " Woah," I say, holding my head as I get up, dazed and confused. I go over to the man who is now unconscious, and I kick him really hard and then run back inside to find Ashley so we could leave fast.
     
  10.  it's Damon!
     
  11. You'll see soon
     
  12. It was a sea of blackness. I was drowning in it, it was slowly suffocating me. The murky, pitch-black place was slowly killing me.

    This unlit hell is where I am dying, stuck, rooted in this dingy pit of torture, forever to keep me here lonely. Suddenly, there is a bright flash and I can vaguely see a dull light at the end of this tunnel like a big nebulous glow. A shadow appears as something short and low to the ground. The creature comes closer. It's like a animal stalking it's prey. It crouches even more, ready to pounce. I see it's teeth, sharp and pointy, created to rip through flesh in seconds. It's bright golden eyes with tiny slits for pupils, staring through me. The monster is the predator and I'm the prey. Deep inside my head, a tiny little voice is screaming for me to run, but all I can do is stand there like a statue, frozen in place. It starts running and then the lights come on inside my head and I start running too. The ray-less light gets dimmer and dimmer until I'm tripping in this dark cavern, trying to find my way out. The ground was trembling and fire shoots up all around, making shadows dance everywhere. Unexpectedly, I began to fall into a fiery hole to an untimely death.

    I sit upright, sweating all over and breathing heavily.
    "I felt like I was dying," I say, groggy and freaking out. I tell myself it was only a nightmare. At least I hope it was.
     
  13. I won't be updating for a couple of
    days because I will be camping, I will still write some more though!
     
  14. Okay… I'll keep bumping this!