The Last Samauri Book Two: The Kids Takoura's POV I looked over at my two brothers Takashi and Tamoru. Tamoru was wearing dark clothing with a hood over his head and cloth serving as a mask pulled over his face and dual swords strapped to his back. Takashi was wearing a Dark Samauri's Kamino with his hands on his one Katana straped to his side. I also wore a dark Kamino, but instead I had two katanas to fight with, after all, I took after my father. Our opponent was dressed in a white samauri's kamino, he had a white pirce of cloth tied around his head as he always wore in battle. He also had dark hair and eyes like Tamoru and I however there was a streak of gray in his hairline. We circled him until we formed a triangle around him, then we struck. Tamoru attacked him as Takashi attacked on the other side. The enemy drew his weapons and blocked both blows, he held them offf until I charged in and twisting in the air until I was flying at him as if he was the center of gravity and I had simply jumped. I kicked him in the chest with both of my legs straight. He flew backwards and onto the ground, I had used him as a wall to do a backflip and landed in a kneeling-crouching position as my brothers immediatly attacked him with everything they had. Howevr even as he lay on the ground he was able to dodge and block long enough to make it back to his feet. He would have beaten them easily had I not joined the fight, I was not the best but all three of us are extrodinary fighters, however our opponent was better. We nodded to each other to make sure we all had the same thoughts. Even he couldn't handle all three of us. We parried, dodged, fliped, rolled, attacked, and kicked until each of ushad our swords at his throat and forced him into a kneeling position. We each sheathed our weapons and bowed as one. Takashi and Tamoru each picked up one if his katanas and offered them to him respectfully. I grined at he who was nicknamed the samauri of death and said to him in a playfull voice "You are getting weaker father." as he stood and sheathed his two weapons "No, you three are getting smarter, faster, and stronger." said Aizen Kurisaki with a smile.
What? No critisizm? No good job? No I love you? No please marry me? Nothing? Cmon! I need to know what I am doing wrong and right!
Describe the setting. And instead of just saying "he dodged the blows" say something like "he twisted and wove his way around our blows like a spider weaves it's thread. I could not hit him" Excellent job overall though. You spaced the paragraphs, appealed things right, and so on.
Aizen's POV I smiled at my three sons as they all bowed in respect. "You three have finally defeated me. I can teach you three no more." I told them as I returned their bows, "Each of you have different styles and different paths, I am and always will be proud of you my sons." I continued as I pulled them into an embrace. I stopped by my daughter's training session in time to see her chop the head off of a dummy with her naginata. I smiled as Tamiko saw me, rested the wooden end of her weapon on the ground and waved at me. I embraced Tamiko and decided to tell her the truth. "You are very skilled my daughter, you look just like your mother too, she would be proud of you." I told her as I felt a burst of pride. "Why are you saying this all of a sudden father? Is something wrong?" Tamiko asked me with concern in her big brown eyes, "You always understood me more than the boys Tamiko!" I complimented her as I motioned for her to sit next to me on the bench. "I am getting old my daughter, soon I fear I will join your mother. I have aged much faster than I anticipated." I confided in her "Well father, you are only 55 but from what I have been told and have seen you have lead a long and full life. However I do not want you to leave us yet father." I smiled, stood and kissed Tamiko on her forehead. "You are very wise my daughter. I will hang on for a while longer for you four. But you must do the same. You children are the reason for me living. Remember that my daughter." "I will father" She replied. "It is time for me to visit Katashe, I will tell you all something important when I get back, I will see you when I get back." I told her as I turned and walked towards Katashe.
Aizen's POV Every since we moved to the home that was less than a mile away from us I had visited her grave three times a day to talk her. Once before breakfast, once after training and before lunch and once before dinner. I knelt before Katashe's grave, closed my eyes and began to speak to Katashe. "Katashe, I have so much to tell you, our sons are all grown up. And our daughter too, she looks just like you, and she is just as smart. She is amazing with a naginata, but she still hasn't found a suiter and it worrys me. It is times like this when I wonder what you would do. Today I plan on choosing an heir, who should I choose? My boys are all talented, strong, and talented, but our daughter is everything you were. Even though rarely are women chosen as heirs she would make a great one. I must choose soon though. I don't know what to do or who to choose. Help me make the descision Katashe, it could effect future generations... I...." I stopped talking and opened my eyes when I felt the temperature change, someone was here, and trying not to be detected. I stood and began to turn, sadly not fast enough. I fell to the ground as I watched wood splinter past the back of my head and infront of me. As I lay on the soft grass I watched my blood dribble infront of me. I stared at the dark shadow as it bent down next to me and whispered "Payback is horrible isn't it?" as he said this I felt the world going going dark. Then, nothing.
Takashi's POV As I looked around in the water I thought of Natoki, speaking of her...... I looked up and saw her smiling face staring down at me from above the water. I quickly broke the surface of the water to meet her. "Hey Mister Samurai" She said with a smile as I ran my hand through her golden hair, pulled her into the water with me, and kissed her. Natoki and I lay on the grass, head head on my chest and my hand running through her long flowing hair. Her electric blue eyes stared up at me lovingly as we talked with each other. "I don't think my father likes you as much as I do Takashi," she told me "Nonesense! He likes me almost as much as I love you Natoki, trust me." I comforted her as I smiled and kissed her. "Well, I hope you are right, because I want you to come home with me for dinner." "Well what are we waiting for? My father will know I am with you." I said to her as I stood and helped her up. "Lets go" I offered her my arm and she took it and rested her head on my shoulder as we walked to her home and away from mine. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Due to some people's request post to the thread, my wall or pm me and tell me if you would like for me to post to your wall whenever I update.
Tamoru's POV I lay with my head on Rasiatami's chest as she ran her hands through my hair and asked me whatever she wanted, as always I relaxed and listened to her and answered when she wanted an answer. Rasiatami and I loved each other and she stayed with me every night. My father had adopted her into the family when we were in our teens and we had been together ever since then. She had hair as black as night and brown eyes that made me melt whenever they even passed over me. Father of course knew about us being together even though we tried to stay quiet, but I believe it is how he felt (and still feels) for mother that kept him from sending Rasiatami away. It was night time and we decided to skip dinner and apologize to father in the morning, he would understand. "Rasiatami, how do you feel about marrying me?" I asked her full of hope. I felt her hands stop and I could feel her gaze turn to the back of my head as she replied "I would love that, why do you ask?" I felt a smile as I turned so I was facing her and moved further north up the bed so I my feet weren't almost falling off and that I could look her in the eyes as I told her, "Because I want to ask you to marry me. And I wanted to know what you would say. Am I correct in thinking that the answer is yes?" I asked her as I moved closer, "You are." she replied with a smile as we kissed each other long and hard. Skipping dinner with father was worth it, he would bevthere tomorrow, but this oppurtinity wouldn't have happened if I had went to yhat lousy dinner. Oh well, this was much more important, and enjoyable.
Thanks, oh, and may I mention that this is all on the same night? If you understand what I meant by this then you are awsome!
Takoura's POV As Istrania lay in the crook of my arm I thought of how much I loved her, and I could see that she loved me. I guess if she didn't then she wouldn't be marrying me now would she? I looked down at her and saw only pure beuty, her light brown hair was over one of her shoulders and her eyes that I knew were dark black were closed as her head leaned agianst my chest and her arm was draped over my chest too, it was a perfect moment and I wanted it to last forever. "We better go to dinner Takoura, we don't want to be late." Istrania suddenly said, opening her eyes and staring into mine. "Why go when we can skip dinner and stay here?" I asked her feeling hopefull that she would agree and turn down dinner, "You're right, let's just stay here Takoura." She said leaning her head back agianst me and wiggling closer to me. As I lay with her back to me I put my arm over her waist and pulled her close to me. We were both tired, and I didn't blame her, but I wanted to be close to her, being near her seemed to clear my head. I could think much better. I slowly got up and retrieved my warrior's Kamino from the side of the bed and tied my katanas to my waist. I left a note to tell her I had gone outside for a while and exited the inn we stayed in at night and sat outside, wondering how our wedding would go and staring towards my home, hoping father would understand.