Another story...enjoy it and please comment, I like criticism, it makes my stories better! Thanks so anyway... I'll begin! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I looked at him, my dad, my very own dad... Tears started to emerge from my glistening blue eyes, the same from his, I had my dads eyes. I used to look at him with such hope, I used to see him as a father to be proud of but now... He has let me down to much. "why...why dad" i blurted out" WHY?" I began screaming at him, all the pain that had been stored away the past 18 years, all came out at once. "I'm sorry morgan" he looked down in shame as he spoke... "were leaving tomorrow!" he left the room as my mother came in, he slammed the heavy, wood door as he left, scuffing the floor in his work shoes. "oh Morgan" my mum grabbed me and pulled me close, she comforted me with her motherly warmth. "I'm going upstairs" I whispered, trying to push through the tears. I walked out the room, through the dark, narrow corridor to my old room, I missed living at home... I lay on my bed, drowning myself in pillows, crying into my old teddy. I began to think about my dad, he was moving to Germany with his girlfriend and her two sons. I knew he wanted a boy,but he got me, a girl... He was a rugby player, so are his step sons, I only run track to please him! Now he Is leaving, forever... Withought me.
I looked at my phone... -4 missed calls: Gemma- Gemma was my dads girlfriend, I called her... "WHAT?!?" I pierced, over the phone. "I'm taking your dad to germany, you can't do anything, feel free to visit us, we might be having to much fun though! Ha!" I heard her laugh, it was like pouring ice into my ears... I hung up the phone and starred into my cream wall, watching every shadow, I didn't move or speak, I just thought, I thought about dad taking me to the park, teaching me to ride and swim, I remember mummy and daddy breaking up, daddy meeting Gemma, I remember there wedding, I remember watching it on tape, I wasn't invited. Now what will I do, my dad won't be there for my graduation, my wedding, the birth of my first child nothing, he will be with them in Germany...
I will update soon... Secret beauty, this Is based on a true story of me and my dad so I understand you
I woke up the next morning, lying on my soft, pink bed, I looked at my phone... - 12:00 am 1 text from DAD- "shit" dad had left, I slept in and now he was gone, i looked at the text... "goodbye hunny, I understand, you didn't want to meet me..." I looked at the message and began to cry, my mom Came in. "sweety? Are u ok?" she asked I stared at her, my eyes pink and watery... "dads gone" "oh sweetie, it's ok, he... He left you this" mom handed me a ticket. I looked at it, reading the print, it said Germany... " he wants you too visit him... Next week" I put the ticket down and looked at it... "ok" I smiled a little and got up, mom looked at me and smiled. "it's nice to see you happy again"
Very good. Well written, but needs proofreading other than that, it's brilliant. Keep up the good work!
It's really good! So update! But please use auto correct. And know the difference between 'to' and 'too'. Capitalise! And refrain from using 'u'! I can't wait for the next update