revenge

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by 5yhhh5, Jul 17, 2012.

  1. When I was young I watched my parents die right in front of me, blood splatter everywhere, I will get revenge I said to the killer. That was 15 years ago when that happened today I saw the killer and I just stoped at my house to get some weapons of choice. I can see him through the window in my house. Maybe he remembers me? Today I get him back. I aim my shrunken carefully and steadily and throw it. I close my eyes cause I'm uncertain if it will hit him. When I open my eyes he's not dead. He's pointing an ak47 at me. I am scared so I run into my kitchen and grab knifes, all of them. I throw them all really fast while runing back and forth through the windows opening. I threw them all but one. I missed with all those knifes I threw at the killer. I only have 1 knife left, what do I do? I think, I could either throw the knife or I could knife him buy slashing/stabbing him. I chose to throw the knife. I go around to my backyard and hide behind my car were he can't see me. I aim my knife steadily and throw it. It hits him in the head and he's not dead. He's reaching for his cellphone I think with his shaky hands. I run to him and grab his gun and shoot him. I make sure he's dead before I run away.

    I hope u liked it
     
  2. Holy shit I have to reread before I post
     
  3. Woah that's really good!
     
  4. *shuriken

    *knives
     
  5. Remember to make paragraphs
     
  6. A few spelling errors but good
     
  7. It's kind of rushed... And honestly make no apparent sense of how the killer is outside his house and miraculously has an AK-47...
     
  8. And how can you run into your house if he has an AK-47 pointed at you?.. Wouldn't he have shot you?..
     
  9. Now now jada it's just a story
     
  10. I know. It's a good one.

    Just had a question .3.
     
  11. Bump don't rush it though and explain more.
     
  12. Thanks for feedback. Follow me if you have any ideaa for my next story cause I'm totally out
     
  13. it's like the TV series revenge, only, more rushed and the series is longer, is that where you got you inspiration?