All I can say that's bad about this is It needs more description, I can tell it's not an Adamgontier kinda story... It has a somewhat anime style to it but I like it
Logan: *walks into danzo's office* WHY CAN'T I BE A NORMAL BOY?!? Danzo: Because, you are secretly... A demon... Logan: WHAT?!? Danzo: Nothing... Logan: I just want my god damn leaf to do something! Danzo: I had the same problem... Stick your hand in this bucket of goop. Logan: .-. This better not relate to ben and jerry's... *sticks hand in goop* Danzo: Now, in a few seconds this goop will probably- *Goop starts glowing* Danzo: Start doing crazy shit like that... This is either a new type of energy, or the leafs were old. *Goop hardens* Danzo's thoughts: Damn, if it cracks, it'll be exactly what mine did. And if that's the case he could have god-like powers if I train him correctly, unlike me who had to figure it by himself... *Goops cracks* Danzo: HELL YES! Logan: What? Danzo: You have the same energy type as me! Haha! You'll be a badass! Logan: Umm, so which class will I go to? Danzo: I'll be privately teaching you. This energy is a pain in the ass to handle, but you'll be whooping asses and taking names at the end! Logan: Sweet! > Danzo: *sighs* Well, i'm glad I let you enroll :lol: Logan: So- Danzo: Don't ask questions! It's time to train and blow shit up! Logan: Fine! Danzo: Well, it's lunch now. So go eat and stuff. Logan: Okay... *Logan enters cafeteria* PHANT: Hey new guy! Sit with us! Logan: New guy has a name. PHANT: Ok stephano. Logan: It's Logan dammit! L-O-G-A-N! PHANT: Well, my name is PHANT. This is my good friend casp, that's nina, buddy is across from me, azzy is to the right of casper. Any questions? Logan: Who is that guy over there? PHANT: That's mike, he's crazy. Logan: Mike, get yo' ass over here! Mike: Hahahahaha... Sure... Hahahahaha... Logan: So, this is pretty small school huh? PHANT: No, we're just the only characters the author cares about Mike: Has anyone heard about the guy who escaped from the prison? Casp: No, who is it? Mike: I forgot his name, it was odd though... PHANT: Mr. Chair? Mike: THAT'S HIM! Anyways, he is the son of the worst villain ever, Zim. PHANT: Oh god! My grandfather was killed because of him! That bastard... Buddy: Well, my friend's (vice) grandpa was The Skeleton. And lemme tell ya, The Skeleton said that Zim was one hell of a demon. When The Skeleton used his power to almost kill The CPTWells, he said that "Zim's power made me almost throw up, it was cruel, and it also made my lung turn green." Logan: I think my grandpa is CPTWells, because we both have the same last name, but I wouldn't know, my Dad died an hour after I was born. Casp: My grandma was very good friends with PHANT (older one), she cried for days that he died. I feel so sad now... Azzy: My grandma was one hell of a dancer! Even in her old age! But sadly she died a month ago... I will have the dance moves, it's fate. --- >.> Was that enough detail? Hmm? For the fan fic section, you probably won't get the whole grandpa/grandma thing. Keep it snazzy guys! I'll try to do a chapter a day. TRY.
New Characters: MrChair: --- Logan: So, what'd you guys do when I was in the principle's office? Mike: We talked about different clans, and their abillities. And also how to get in them. Logan: So like the Uchiha clan has the sharigan in Naruto? Mike: Exactly. But fortunatly you don't have to be in the clan family. Logan: Well, let the readers and I know details. Mike: There are 4 clans: Unknown Infinity Sex Bob-Omb Echelon Curacao Blue Unknow Infinity is known for their overwhelming strength. 1 strategy, bust through the door and start killing. Sex Bob-Omb is known for for their experience, they have the weakness to many opponents. Semi-strategetic. Echelon is about strategy, they don't even rank you based on strength, just on knowledge. Curacao Blue is a sneaky clan, nobody really picks it, I think andy said it's about curses and cures, but i'm not sure. Here is the "must haves" to enter: Unknown Infinity: Wear yellow shoes. Sex Bob-Omb: Wear a red glove. Echelon: Wear glasses, it could be any kind. (3D, reading, etc) Curacao Blue: Wear a blue bandana. PHANT: Damn, is class dismissed? *everyone laughs but Mike* Buddy: I'm choosing Echelon. I'm not really a strength guy, and if I have a good strategy, I won't need weaknesses. Azzy: I'm choosing Unknown Infinity. It'll make my attack based energy stronger. Casp: I'm choosing Sex Bob-Omb, if I know the enemies weakness, I won't really need a strategy or strength. PHANT: I second casp. Nina: I second Buddy. Mike: I'm curious, so i'm choosing Curacao. PHANT: Which are you choosing stephano? Logan: For the love of god! It's logan! PHANT: Fine, LOGAN, which are you picking? Logan: Unknown Infinity. My energy type probably suits it the best. Mike: Well, since we're all going to visit our clubs tommorow, I might as well ready myself with some knives. Just in case. PHANT: *cough* cutter *cough* Logan: Umm, can the author do a time skip, because this conversation is boring. *The next day* Berk: Ok, everyone get on the bus that leads to the clan you want. *Majority go into UI, SBO, or Echelon* Mike: Why am I the only one for curacao? :,( *Mike arrives at the door for curacao* MrChair: Well hello... *Sticks needle into mike, making him pass out* MrChair: That jail was easy to break out of, and since they sealed any way of using my power, i'll just use this boy for a container, and use his power, to do my dirty-work. --- Hmm? Enough action? It's still a set-up, but whatever xD Keep it snazzy.
New Characters: Gonzo: Panda: Hermes: Vice: --- *Echelon Clan* Gonzo: Ok kids, this is the clan known as Echelon. In order to have access to every book in the vast library, you must pass a quiz. *crowd "ooooo, ahhh"s* Buddy: When can I take it? Sooner the better. Gonzo: Anytime you can. Go over to the testing room, good luck! Buddy: *walks into room* psh, i'm the only one that wants to take it........ Forever alone... *picks up test paper and pencil* (Quiz and buddy's answers) Question 1. On what day did CPTWells defeat skeleton? A. Monday B. Tuesday C. Friday D. None of the above Buddy's answer: D *side note* it's actually on a thursday* Question 2. What is the formula for offensive type energy? Buddy's answer: Willpower Training=Success Question 3. What is most important for an illsuionist? Buddy's answer: Imagination Question 4. How many types of energy are possible, and how many are known throughout the other? (The other is the place they're at) Buddy's answer: Infinite, and 4 known. Buddy: That was one short-ass test... Easy as pie also... Buddy: Here is my test, Gonzo. Gonzo: Let's see... Mmmhm... Mhmm *Croud whispers: "Surely he'll ace it, he's the best in class, a prodigy." Gonzo: Damn you're good. Perfect score. *Unknown Infinity Clan* Panda: Ok kids, you'll get a mass amount of power if you beat Vice one on one. Put on these suits, his attacks will have no effect on your bodies, but when your suit glows red, it means you would've been dead. Anyone wanna shot? *everyone raises their hand* Panda: Everyone put a suit over your clothes, and then meet back here. *Everyone does the following* Vice: Hehehe! Who'se up first?!? Let's battle in the arena! *Noob who thinks he's a boss goes first* Vice: Ok then *A blue gun appears in hand* Noob: *forms a ball of energy, seems to be very weak* *Hurls ball of energy over to Vice* Vice: *Swallows it whole* Nice treat... *Gun transforms into a sniper-looking gun* *Aims at Noob's head* Vice: *BANG!* *Gun fires a bullet made out of pure energy straight at noob's head* Noob's suit: Glows red Noob: Damn you're good *Several noobs later* Logan: Damn, i'm the last one left. He has 3 types of guns: shotgun, automatic, sniper. Vice: Let's get this over with... *Automatic mode* *Energy flys out of the gun* Logan: *holds his hand up* *Big purple shield of energy protects logan* Sweet! Logan: *makes a fist* *shield turns into armor and fits right over the suit* Vice: Finally! I can go all out now! *Gun turns into bazooka* heheh... *Huge rocket zooms out of the bazooka* Logan: *sticks arm out* *Big, purple, hand appears out of logan's palm* *Raises arm up, and then back at vice* *purple hand grows an arm, and grabs rocket, then throws it at the ground* *Arena floor is destroyed* Vice: Damn... This guy is strong for no teachings... He must play a lot of video games. *gun transforms into shotgun* GET OVER HERE! *Takes about 2 seconds to dash over to logan* Logan: *grabs Vice's face* Your gonna need some surgery after this *Hand explodes* Vice: *lays on the floor, half dead* Logan: My prize? *Sex Bob-Omb Clan* Hermes: fill out the survey and don't mess up anything, clan quests are available tommorow, finish 10 'A' rank quests and you'll have a VIP card. PHANT: Cool story bro, tell it again. Hermes: One more sarcastic word from you and you won't be alive tommorow. PHANT: u-understood! (Survey) 1. Name 5 people's weaknesses 2. Finish #1 --- Sorry for the lateness, I don't have an excuse, but! I hope you liked it! Keep it snazzy!