New Characters: MrChair: --- Logan: So, what'd you guys do when I was in the principle's office? Mike: We talked about different clans, and their abillities. And also how to get in them. Logan: So like the Uchiha clan has the sharigan in Naruto? Mike: Exactly. But fortunatly you don't have to be in the clan family. Logan: Well, let the readers and I know details. Mike: There are 4 clans: Unknown Infinity Sex Bob-Omb Echelon Curacao Blue Unknow Infinity is known for their overwhelming strength. 1 strategy, bust through the door and start killing. Sex Bob-Omb is known for for their experience, they have the weakness to many opponents. Semi-strategetic. Echelon is about strategy, they don't even rank you based on strength, just on knowledge. Curacao Blue is a sneaky clan, nobody really picks it, I think andy said it's about curses and cures, but i'm not sure. Here is the "must haves" to enter: Unknown Infinity: Wear yellow shoes. Sex Bob-Omb: Wear a red glove. Echelon: Wear glasses, it could be any kind. (3D, reading, etc) Curacao Blue: Wear a blue bandana. PHANT: Damn, is class dismissed? *everyone laughs but Mike* Buddy: I'm choosing Echelon. I'm not really a strength guy, and if I have a good strategy, I won't need weaknesses. Azzy: I'm choosing Unknown Infinity. It'll make my attack based energy stronger. Casp: I'm choosing Sex Bob-Omb, if I know the enemies weakness, I won't really need a strategy or strength. PHANT: I second casp. Nina: I second Buddy. Mike: I'm curious, so i'm choosing Curacao. PHANT: Which are you choosing stephano? Logan: For the love of god! It's logan! PHANT: Fine, LOGAN, which are you picking? Logan: Unknown Infinity. My energy type probably suits it the best. Mike: Well, since we're all going to visit our clubs tommorow, I might as well ready myself with some knives. Just in case. PHANT: *cough* cutter *cough* Logan: Umm, can the author do a time skip, because this conversation is boring. *The next day* Berk: Ok, everyone get on the bus that leads to the clan you want. *Majority go into UI, SBO, or Echelon* Mike: Why am I the only one for curacao? :,( *Mike arrives at the door for curacao* MrChair: Well hello... *Sticks needle into mike, making him pass out* MrChair: That jail was easy to break out of, and since they sealed any way of using my power, i'll just use this boy for a container, and use his power, to do my dirty-work. --- Hmm? Enough action? It's still a set-up, but whatever xD Keep it snazzy.
Usopp!! I think you have a good start and story line/idea. I'm not sure if this is a rough draft or if something else but it is good. The characters could use a little more depth. Give mote reasoning to their actions.