Revenge redone/remake

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by 5yhhh5, Jul 17, 2012.

  1. Revenge

    It all happened when I was young, when I saw my older brother die infront of my eyes. I watched him suffer for over an hour in true pain, I couldn't do anything. if would have done something I would be next, to suffer, to die a painful death. I ran out of the room when the killer was looking away, when he decided to draw his gun back. While I was running out of the room I heard a gunsots and the whistles of bullets passing me. I started to sprint away in terror. I heard my brother yell " HELP ME! Don't shoot please" and then I heard the gunshot. I promised to myself would get the killer back for changing my life forever, for makeing me and my brother suffer, and for killing my family member. That happened 20 years ago. I see the killer right now outside my window. I see he has a handgun sticking out of his pocket. It's a desert eagle. I run into my room in true terror thinking about the obstacles I must overcome today. What if I get shot? What if he chases me? What if he remembers me? Those were the first thoughts going through my mind. I ran and got my commando off my gun rack. I run to the window and he's still standing outside. I aim and fire, I hit him dead on. I go outside to check if he's dead and I leave my gun inside. I feel his pulse, he's not dead he's still alive. He grabs his gun and sticks it to my stomach. I feel pain a he pulls the trigger. Will this be how I die? Is this were I'm gonna die? Do I still have a chance to kill him? I get up in unbearable pain and I run as fast as I can to go inside to get my commando. I can feel that I'm starting to get unconscious. I run outside and I aim my gun while I'm dizzy. I shoot, I hit him dead on in the head. I pass out. When I woke up all I saw was medics and cops surrounding me in the hospital. Will I be arrested or be thanked for killing a killer?

    I hope you guys liked it
     
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  4. This is better nice job
     
  5. That was amazing ;) nice job
     
  6. Thx guys
     
  7. If you get shot in the stomach with a Desert Eagle, it would tear you apart. Desert Eagles are very powerful. You would not be able to run at all. In point blank range you'd probably bleed out before you could walk to your front door.
     
  8. Seriously u can't just be nice I'll bet it's better than what u can do its certainly better than what I can just be nice ;) thnx
     
  9. Have you read my stories? 
     
  10. Yeah. Have you read his stories? they're pretty epic .3.
     
  11. Adam just stop ruining my story's u ruined my other one and your ruined this one if u don't have a urging nice to say don't say it
     
  12. I'm not saying mean things. It's flawed, I point it out. 
     
  13. I LOVE DESERT EAGLES :3
     
  14. ._. It's good, but I agree with Adam, sorry dude, and Amanda also, they rock.
     
  15. I've shot one.... It was fun