New Song? Maybe

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by _Sheogorath_The_Mad_Prince_, Jul 5, 2012.

  1. Hey all you PimD people our there. I've decided to write a new song for my band. Let me know what you think and I'll add as I go

    Sitting here alone, thinking of all the things I should've said. Crying harder then my ghosts, already dead. Do u believe in love eternal? Because I'm insure, how can I not see my faith, anymore..
    I know you're leaving, and I know there's nothing I can say! But please don't leave me here dying in this way! I miss the things I should have said, the fights I could escape, do I believe in yesterday? No i dont, because there's nothing left to take..
     
  2. Advice is always welcome
     
  3. It's really good! I wrote songs too!
     
  4. Thank you  I'd love to read a couple of yours
     
  5.  It's Really Good 
     
  6. Thanks  bump me I guess if u want the second half
     
  7. How did I see, that everything wouldn't end up right for me. Why didn't I know, that I'd be on my knees begging you not to go. My love you are gone but not forgotten. My heart is withered torn and rotten, to the cooor..
     
  8. I know you're leaving, and I know there's nothing I can say! But please don't leave me here dying in this way! I miss the things I should have said, the fights I could escape, do I believe in yesterday? No i dont, because there's nothing left to take..
     
  9. Thank you I'm thinking of maybe doing alot of songs on here. I hope I can keep such an admirer as yourself
     
  10. It's Really Good ! I can barely write 2 sentences of a song 
     
  11. Wow it's really good,
     
  12. Thanks. Check my other song
     
  13. I write songs too. People on here have only seen one...
     
  14. What song? I'd love to read it
     
  15. It's a song I wrote for a situation... It took me like 30 minutes... I didn't write it for anything serious really... I can post it here if you want...
     
  16. Yea do that I wanna read it 
     
  17. I love it. It's really deep in emotional. I write songs but I have never shown them to anyone. I'm afraid of what people will say.  I'm such a weenie sometimes.
     
  18. It's a slow song, but it's short... The slowness makes it about 3 minutes... Here it is...

    Baby, after all these years. You come back into my life. And after all this time, I still love you like I did, but I ****** up I know. I shouldn't have hurt you like this.

    And every time I've seen you, you've been well. But I've just been going crazy, thinking how I put you through hell. So, let me know, what I can do, to make it up to you.

    Let me see the shine in your eyes, let me see that you are just fine. I wanna make sure that you can be happy, make sure I haven't ruined too much.

    I will be there now, make sure nothing happens to us from here on out. Just let me tell you, the few words I have left...

    Baby, after all these years. You come back into my life. And after all this time, I still love you like I did, but I ****** up I know. I shouldn't have hurt you like this.