The Bad Girls Chance

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Tormentor_person (01), Jun 26, 2012.

  1. I thought a lot of stories are about a bad cheerleader captin/bad but really popular girl and the good girl who falls in love and **** well I'm giving it a twist so read on...
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    Beth's PoV |
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    As I walked down to the bathroom my brown perfect hair blew behind me I walked down the stairs. I looked in the mirror and saw what I alway see every five minutes, green eyes and long eyelashes eye make up almost plastered on, everyone thinks I wear fake tan but it is a natural tan and my face is completely clear no spots or freckles or moles or anything. I washed my face and brushed my teeth then went to my room again to get changed into my short skirt and strappy top with loads of accessories like normal. I put on my make up and head downstairs, forgetting that my Dad is helping in another country(he is a reporter) and my Mum probably has a hangover again she always has hangovers on Mondays. Great my favourite day... Monday! I hop in my baby blue convertible mini and headed to school meeting up with my boyfriend Brandon.


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    Thanks for reading please tell me if everything is ok and bump and comments please? THANK YOU. This is my first story anyways xD
    Sorry if it's too short an update
     
  2. Nice Story: Keep On Going
     
  3. I like the story but work on grammar, and using better word choice please!
     
  4. Thanks and thank you ^ for telling me what I didnt do :3
     
  5. Another update will be done today sorry guys I'm really busy so, sorry if I don't get it done
     
  6. Thats good :) keep going
     
  7. Ditto love it
     
  8. Guess what readers!



    Yes that's right...


    UPDATE TIME!!!!
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    Beth's PoV~ |
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    Brandon is so cute even though he is a bit dorky sometimes he is the most popular boy in the school thanks to me. I mean his gorgeous soft brown hair just short enough and his hypnotising hazel eyes and oh my gosh, that tanned skin everything about him makes me fall in love with him even more.

    I drove Brandon to school and we talked the full way. He gave me a kiss on the cheek when he got in. I parked the car and he got out and opened my door, how romantic.

    We went into school holding hands and hung around my locker, him leaning against the locker next to mine casually and me fixing my make up in my locker mirror. I noticed the school shy girl a couple of lockers away then she walked past me without saying anything to me. "How rude can she get?" I asked Brandon in a sarcastic voice 'cause I don't really care about her and he replied with a cheeky laugh. I mean she is ugly, she doesn't have a mum or dad and no family and I bet you she would be forever alone I mean who would actually want to date her?
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    That's today's update hope you liked it! I am gonna do an update on Brandons PoV tomorrow or maybe today again depends on how busy I am again :L thank you again for reading and sorry if it's too short :F
     
  9. :D Awesome. Just a couple of Run
    On sentences.
     
  10. Oopsies /).-) -face desk- Lol :L anyway thankies
     
  11. Lol she can be a bit of a bitch but I can't wait for the update!!!!
     
  12. Why do you say that? xD
     
  13. She like said that girl was ugly and shit but it's still a great story x
     
  14. Agreed  bump
     
  15. Someone's a snob... Lol I like the story so far ally you could use a little bit more work on grammar and slowing down to add more description but it's all good ^_^