~Introduction~ My name is Treyvon, I'm 15, and I live in Brightmoor, Detriot also known as one of the worst parts in the city. My dad ran when he found out my mom was pregnant, and well my mom is just a druggatic, high all the time she doesn't give a shit about me. I learned to take care of myself, and make my own descions. ------------------------------------------- What do you guys think? And that wasn't the story it was the introduction telling about the story, this is going to tell the obstacles of a "Ghetto" Teenager and how he makes his descions and what he becomes of life. Should I write the story or do you think it would be boring or what leave your comments please, thanks P.S. it is boring because I have wrote the story I still have many Ideas.
I'm going to write a part of the story to show you since the intro is boring and doesn't tell much. -------------------------------------------- Part 1: Standing here wishing it was a nightmare, my mothers just sitting their on the ripped up couch ignoring me too high to understand that anythings going on. I leave frustrated out of our apartment. I take a walk around our neighborhood. Then I see the neighborhood gang following me, I walk into the corner store trying to avoid them. I can't see them anymore so I walk back outside and continue my walk then I here something and I turn around as one guy jumps on top of me and starts punching right in the face while the others are kicking me. I tryed to punch back but I soon gave up everything became blurry.
What the hell? They don't have a reason! Dont write about gangs if you don't know shit about them! And don't comment on what I just said readers it's none of your damn business. That is not how you portray gangs