All Aboard S.S FML

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *FashionablyOnTime (01), Jun 14, 2012.

  1. Chapter 1: Best friends pick up the phone
    Marci's P.O.V

    Just one short text caused all this pain and misery. This is the story of my struggle. Or should I say "our" struggle.

    It was around half after seven pm when I received this text from Deena. You see this girl has been my chick since third grade. I know every detail about her.

    I open the text somewhat unsure of who it was, because the number wasn't saved "don't b mad." not even using proper spelling.

    At that moment I knew exactly what she did, but I went numb and texted back. "I promise I won't , what is it?"

    She took what it seemed like forever to me to reply. "Zane asked me out."

    I refused to text her back, I hated her so much. She knew how I felt about Zane but of course she had to because whoever I want she wants! Only difference is I never get the boy. She is a fake bra-stuffing numb-skull. I'm not speaking out of hurt it's all true! I quickly open my phone and create a new message to Zane.

    "So you and Deena?" I was so hurt my heart felt like knives were stabbing the remains of the shattered bits.

    Zane replied causally "Yeah, what are you following me?"

    I felt so betrayed, but it wasn't the first time she did this. I did something I never thought I do..I burst out into tears. These were nothing compared to the tears I experienced later on. I wanted to die on the spot so I didn't have so much pain and misery soiling my soul. I cried out to God wondering why he was punishing me.

    Texting Deena back reluctantly "Don't worry I'll be fine I'm happy for you." I even put a smiley face.

    She's so naive, I say I'm fine and she believes it! DEENA HOW BOUT YOU PUT SOME EFFORT IN THIS FRIENDSHIP. Can't I just win...just this once....I beg of you god....I only want him....
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  2. In naïve, you have to change the eye. :) that's all I found.
     
  3. Thanks Bekka I didn't know that :3
     
  4. *the I
    What a fail I just made. XD
     
  5. I like it 
     
  6. Holy crap ._. this story has been viewed 30 times but only 5 people said something
     
  7. Yeah 0.0 that's messed up right?
     
  8. How do you know the number of views? 

    And good story ^.^
     
  9. I checked PIMD on my computer