On My Way...

It's really good Torie!

Use paragraphs, especially between dialogues, and se punctuation! Other than that it's great!

 

Awesome I like it!

 

Freakin' bump!! It's already amazing

 

Agh!! Later is too long!! B.U.M.P.

 

I like it! Bump!

 

When have you ever seen writing without spacing after punctuation?

 

It's a good story but remember to:

- Capitalize
- Punctuation
- Spaces After Punctuation
- And When Making Paragraphs Double Spacing (hitting return 2 times) looks neater

Sorry if I sound mean; not trying to be.