Be sure to type out the full word, space after commas, capitalize first and last names, and you're kind of rushing into it, and that's a problem with most stories. They got into a relationship far too quickly, and Hades's son obviously would be less...welcoming.
Claire It had already been a week of school. I figured my and Carter would be better acquainted. Eeer,wrong soo wrong. Carter was so off and on. On days he would act like we were best of friends and then hate me. Pfft guy-pms. I snapped out of my train of thought something off. I glanced up in science class. Were was Grant he wasn't here this morning. That was it, that's what was off. And now I had no science partner. Isn't this great. The teacher talked babbling on and on. "Mrs. Marian"she announced slamming her ruler across my desk. I jumped up staring at the ruler then her. "Y-y-yes mam"I muttered. "I see you partner isn't here, so you'll have to sit with Mr.Maywether" I nodded my head grabbing my stuff. I walked back to the table she pointed at. I sat down not paying attention. Then glanced over. Sitting next to me was an attractive guy. Not half as attractive as my Grant but still... He smiled awkwardly at me. I turned toward him and smiled back. "I'm Claire and you are"I asked. He looked at me shocked. "I'm um-um Seth" "nice to meet you Seth, ok what are we doing cuz I don't understand..."I said cutting off, something on his face telling me to stop. He looked angry and upset. "what are you asking me for, because I'm a nerd, just cheat off of me right"he snapped at me. I stared at him blankly then shook my head. "nerd what are you talking about, your a football player and wrestler. Your way up there your not a nerd" I stared at him closer. He had milky choclatey skin, but I knew he was black. With perfect straight, sparkling teeth. His eyes where a dim green going on hazel. With a almost smooched in nose but it fit him. His hair was cut very short. But still looked nice. He was like a miniature of Chris Brown mixed with ..... OH MY GOD Floyd Mayweather!! It explained alot,The way he was just looked wealthy. The class ended and I just talked to him. We sat on a bench hidden near the football hill. I asked him alot of questions and him back. He was nice, slightly awkward. I sat down confused. He was so nice and cute but I didn't like him. Any time before I would be all over him. Even if I had a bf. But now I just wanted him as a friend. I smiled at him about to say someone called me. "Claire, WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN, And why are you with him" I glanced in the direction yelling at me. Uh oh, I had forgot about him. I didn't know why but I was scared. It was ....... Who do you think it is? Three bumps and I'll update
Grant I walked around campus angrily. Where was she? I looked in the upstairs grade, she was always with that loser. Not there I went one level higher,my brothers grade. I was the most popular in my grade, but my brother. He was a football star,everything every guy wanted to be. I walked around cautiously. No she wasn't here, so where the he'll was she. Then I saw her thru a window. with that Oreo. She was on The bench. I felt my chest grow bigger as I tried to control myself. This was dumb, I was amazing,handsome. I was the next Adonis Devilio. The next my brother. I walked down the stairs hurriedly. Each step pissing me off more. I felt like hurting someone. I felt like hurting her. Finally I walked down trying to contain my anger. But I blew it. "Claire, WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN, And why are you with him"I screamed angrily. I ran full force at Seth. His eyes flew open as he tried to stand back. I grabbed his collar. "Leave now, get outta here Seth"I muttered acidly in his ear. Claire stood up, her big blue eyes scared. Her hair fluttered around her. Like showing it's self off. I could imagine it saying's beautiful like the girl ' I shook my head and shoved Seth. He shrugged and walked off. Then Claire stared at me. She had an almost blank look then it turned angry. She came at me and shoved me. She barely made me move half a step back. She hit my chest weakly, yelling at me. That's when I snapped. I grabbed her by her shoulders slamming her on the wall. She closed her mouth almost shrinking to the side of the wall. I pressed myself on her yelling in her face. "Claire, stop being a slut. Who do you think you are yelling at me.IM YOU BOSS GOT IT!!!!"She nodded. Soft tears filled her eyes. I wiped her tears putting my hand on her cheek. She snatched it away. "don't even touch me"she breathed. She tried to slide away from me. That's when I got angrier. I pressed myself against her harder. I slapped her face, holding her down. "what don't you get. I own you now,I'll touch you as much as I want"I said sliding my hand up her skirt. She almost collapsed in my arms. She closed her eyes. I wrapped myself around her tiny body. She's so petite, and little. She opened her eyes. Tears streaming down her face. None stop, I heard her sobs. "please don't, please"she sobbed silently. I lifted my head staring at her. "please don't what?"I asked her. "please don't rape me" she yelled back. I dropped her small body. Rape her? No,no,no. She sat up, wiping her tears. She got up hurriedly and ran away. She ran as fast as she could but stopped halfway thru the football field. I felt someone's hand on my shoulder. I looked behind me,great. "what Adonis"I muttered. "nothing little brother,just enjoying the show" "what show"I asked warily. "that soap opera you gave, thought your anger issues were cured"he laughed and glanced at her sitting there. Her shirt was ruffled messily her skirt teared slightly. "your no better than me" "ya ya want me to go grab her, she needs to clean up" "ya and what just drop her off at her house" "no our house time to introduce her to mom" I agreed, not knowing what would actually happen. He grabbed her, carrying her easily. I was scared mom was hard to impress. And harder for her to be nice. I stared at Claire's crumpled body in the back. Well here goes nothing. Time to meet the devil herself.