As I lit three candles up in the bathroom and turned off the lights.. I knew that i wasn't doing the right thing but my friend's told me to do it and I wanted to see if it was real or not. I looked up and stared straight at the mirror took a deep breath and here I was. " Bloody Mary, Bloody Mary, Bloody Mary... The Lights Flickered Their was a woman in a white dress holding a knife with red blood stains on her clothing she stared at me deeply in my eyes and screamed. She grinned as I ran out the door, she keep chasing after me holding the knife... I yelled out for my friends.. But they were no where in sight..at this very moment I thought to myself and said I am going to die today. Bloody Mary whispered yes and I am going to take you with me She grinned in horror.. * 100 comments for part two* Please only post positive comments of the story and if it's good so far.. Thank you
If you only want me to post positive comments, how can you improve? And 100 comments is waaaaaaaay too far-fetched. That's a hundred pages dude. A HUNDRED.
So much fail... I don't even... I don't give a crap if you say only positive. This is terribly written. I'm not hating, I'm stating what everyone else is wanting to say. Punctuation, capitalization, grammar...learn it! Use it! It's easier on our eyes.
Please. Get a book, and learn it from there. Learn whatever Adam said. Punctuation, grammar, all that jazz. Learn it BEFORE you demand for 100 comments.