well im gonna be starting to writing a story ..... dont know if i should go on and write or just keep it to my self p.s if i do write the story ill appreciate some critizism u know let me,know wat im doing wrong so i could make the story better for ya.
its started off as a simply clean up job to clear D.C.H.Q Major project but then into a nightmare where ever turn would be the death of you,things you find in horror movies,images that may never leave your mind,and all your squad mates dying before your eyes.... things will never be the same Logans pov: it was a cold foggy morning as we were driving to a waypoint to clean up what scientist at D.C.H.Q started that claimed will clear the area of a virus that was lethal to the community and ended up wiping out the entire population. The cargo truck came to a Complete stop as ryan, our squad leader signaled us to head out. Ryan pov: we all exited the vehicle as i finished briefing our objective and what Com center told warned us might happened but i didnt care. we all took a quick glance around the dust filled city. "All right D.C.H.Q informed us that the caspulse they sent off landed in 4 seperate locations and we need to go in teams to go and fine them" everyones pov: ryan paired jerry and jose to one, logan was paired with trevor to find one, cole was paired up with angel the only girl in our squad, ryan paired up the new guy ray and we all spreaded out.... little did we know we were setting up our own death sentence. feedback? tell me watcha think of it so far and expect a update soon
logan and trevors pov: we had enter the ghetto part of the city and proceeded searching.trevor seemed to be goofing off firing a few shots into the air with his ak-47,"hey dumbass, save your ammo we might need it!"i yelled as trevor walked farther away from me."chill logan its not like there nothing to shoot at" as he shot at a few windows from small corner stores". i glared at trevor and turned to see what seemed to be a dead bodie lying on the street, turned to find trevor outta the street."great where is this moron at?!" i said with a angry tone of voice. i looked every where till i heard gun shots come from a store near by. i didnt hesitate and ran straight to the noise,before i ran in i took a glance at the dead bodie i saw before but this time it wasnt there.I got back to what i was doing and ran in, i slowly moved around gun drawn and aimed,as i got closer to the back room i heard noises... noises u would normally here when u are eatting something and found the source of the noise.i walked in and saw trevors legs in the same room as the noise,"Trevor what the crap are u doing on the floor!"he didnt reply as i went to see wat he was doing, the more i got closer the more blood i saw near trevors body when i got close enough i saw the bodie from the streets moving over trevor, his stomach was ripped open and the hand digging through the guts and eatting it.The figure looked at me with a blanketless face and blood all over its mouth,pale it stood up and stumbled towards me... mosning and grunting,in a heart beat i aimed and fired at the figures head dropping it instantly."SH*T!!" i glanced at both the bodies on the floor disgusted"i dont know weather to be concerned about my partner being killed and turned into a manwich or the fact that there may me be more of those .. things out there",there was grunting and moaning come from the room next to me. Feedback? thanks for reading and expect a update soon.
jerry and joses pov: we stumbled through the city for a while and appered to be be lost and what seemed like hours was only 30 minutes. jerry and jose basically talked for awhile till they came to a complete stop as they heard a few gun shots."whoa.. jose what do u think those shots were for" jerry said alittle worried looking around to see if anything is watching them."jerry grow a pair you know how a gun sounds like they must of saw something and shot it, that or trevor is being the douche he is... i hate to be logan right about now" jose shouted as gun shots go off again and they see logan run in the distance."hey was that logan? i think that was him!,should we follow him?" jerry replied."ehhh hes a tough guy he could do fine on his own"jose replies. jerry still worries to turn around and sees a girl pale as can be,head turned,bloody from the neck down"miss are u ok " jerry says with a suspious tone snd jose turns around to see what going on"Jesus! im surprised shes still alive"jose says in amasement. the girl didnt reply but stumbled closer to them. jose back up as jerry walk towards her. he pulls out from his bag a first aid and grabs a bandage, but before he could wrap it around her cut the girl jumps and tackles him to the floor as jerry struggles to push her off"jose help me!!".Jose look down at jerry and back at the building where logan entered and takes off to the building."jose!!!! you Bast*rd!!"jerry struggles and gets biten by the girl and screams in pain as he pushes the girl off and pulls out a scalpe and jabs it into her right eye."Jose.... im gonna kill u!" jerry gets up andwalks off wraping his arm up in gause and bandage and ripping his dog tag off and tossing it onto the ground. Feedback? Post a comment i would appricate it and let me know what you think of the story so far.
ryans and rays pov: we were in a rush going through the northside district because we both couldnt stand roaming a dust filled city looking for capsule that could just be about anywhere in this ghost town."Hey,newbie did u see anything where a capsule can be at" ryan shouted running through the streets."no sir!"ray replied breathlessly trying to keep up. they both came to a complete stop as they saw a small group of infected near by,"newbie stay hear and guard my back"he whisper as he headed towards them pistol drawn and aim at the closes one."excuse me you are in a quarintined zone im gonna have to ask you to come with me."ryan asked in a calm tone of voice they all turned and stood there looking at him and stumbled towards him, the closer they where the more he could clearly see bites on their arms,legs,and occasionally there necks."Freeze damn it!?!"ryan tone got angrier. they stumbled closer clawing at him, he hesitated and moved back and shoot every single one in the chest pushing them back alittle but still standing."what the...!?!?!"shoots them again but getting head shots dropping the zombies,"sir i suggest we get outta here we startled a larger group of those things" ray said nervously "let me radio in the rest of the squad to check on them first"ryan replies pressing a button on his ear piece"logan,trevor,jose,jerry,cole, angel report when u here this"the signal messes up and ends the transmission.ray looks at ryan with a nervous look"what happened sir?" "we are gonna go hunt down the others and abort this mission" they both load up there guns and head bake to the city.
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cole and angels pov: we were able to get to the center of town navigating our way to the middle well aware that they must have sent one to the middle checking each building. there was a few guns rounds but they did not focus on it they seemed they were only focused on that one capsule and get outta the scence."angel? quick question?" cole was one for asking questions"yeah cole" angel was basically the one who knows everything and everything."why would the D.C.H.Q send capsules over in the first place if every one came to by gones with the virus" cole questioned,"cause the D.C.H.Q if full of idoits who decided to play god and try to stop a virus that caused some to no harm at all and ended up destroying a city"."why were we sent here then" cole replied." D.C.H.Q didnt want this accident to get to the media and if it did they would close down the corporation" walking off still no sign of anything what so ever. logans and joses pov: "theres some in the room next door" i feared knowing what was behind the door leading to the room. suddenly the sound of the front door being opened and heavy breathing alerted me. i walked out what supposedly was the kitchen of some diner and saw who was at the door,"jose??the hell are u doing here?. wheres jerry??" joses didnt reply all he did was glance up at me and pull out his pistol quickly and aimed it at my direction "JOSE PUT THAT CRAP?!?", joses didnt listen and pulled the trigger. Feedback? tell what you thing might happen and comments would be greatly apperciated
ryan,rays,jose, and logans pov: we were able to make it past the infected undectected and sprinted through the steets as we get stopped by the sound of a gun shot coming from a building seeing jose at the doorway "sir its jose." ray points out,"no shït sherlock" as they walked to him."Damn it jose i nearly shat bricks cause of what you did there" i yelled "is that logan?"ryan looked at jose, jose nodded"Well i saved ur azz from that zombie logan,you owe me one"jose laughed."logan wheres trevor?,jose wheres jerry?" ryan was curious where they where so they could get out of here,"trevor died" logan replies,"jerry wonder off too far and got killed by one of those thing"jose lied keeping a serious face."damn it!! two soldiers died already,we got to go fine cole and angel and get the hell outta here"we all ran off to find cole and angel... it was only a matter of time before something else happened to us
cole and angels pov: after searching for awhile we manage to have found a capsule and destroy it."wooo! we are done" cole said excited to have finished there part of the mission,"ok cole... chill now all we have to do is make it to the cargo truck." they both head there assuring that they were the first to find one so they took their time. Logan,ryan,jose,and rays pov: we made our way to the cargo truck when i stops them,"logan the hell are .." i cuts him off,"ryan shut up" theres a moment of silence they a low sound of a truck being hit repeatedly."what the hell is that" joses replied taking a few step forward to see what was going on,"um.. guys?!?!?" joses voice shook as they took a glance at wat they see."unbelieveable!!" ray whispered to the sight of the cargo truck flipped to its side surround by a larger group of zombies,i stayed quiet for awhile and had my eye on something in the building looking over it,"who the fück is that" i whisper to the others as a gun shot goes off repeatedly picking off zombies one by one. jose uses his sniper scope and aims at the person in the building, a sudden pause stops jose from pulling the trigger and puts the sniper down,"jose? who is that sharp shot"me ryan and ray questioned him,Jose hesitated"its a survivor"studdering aims at the figure at in the building and mumbles under his breath,"i should of done this you finish you off before the zombie got to you jerry"he pulls the trigger. Feedback? Let me know what you think might happened before the next update on tuesday