it's been to long

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by steelwolfe2, May 13, 2012.

  1. That night Tristan laid in bed thinking about the day earlier. He was so happy for the first time in years he didn't feel the emptiness. He decide to go check on the kids he walk out his room he heard a beep and walks down stairs he hears another beep the beeps get faster he sees the bomb it explodes Tristan awakes in the rubble the cops are there they start arresting him as the read the miranda rights all he thinks about is how there all dead all of them the children Shelby Kat and Ali. He sits in a jail cell all emotion goes away. A large man walks over to him hey "pretty boy your gonna make papa happy" the fat man puts his hand on Tristan and Tristan grabs his hand and breaks it. Then he takes the mans hand and kills him with the hand. The cops run in he takes the billy club from the first one and bashes all there heads in with it he walks out the prison drenched in blood. The last guard at the gate runs at Tristan kicks and snaps his neck the last thing the guard sees is Tristan's cold lifeless grey eyes.
     
  2. Oooooo bad boyjk niiiice, I love this no emotion thingy he's got goin on
     
  3. What does bump mean?
     
  4. I put my story at the top so I won't go away
     
  5. Every comment puts my story on page one
     
  6. Tristan walked into the bitch black room "the voice said your here and what of my agents" Tristan leans against the wall "dead now please Bella my sister come out the shadows so I can kill you" the lights turn on reviling a demon women maybe 16 "so Bella you've stayed alive this long bye eating souls I assume" she stands up her long brown hair and green eyes shined as her wings and tail stretch "very intuitive brother now I'm gonna eat yours and I'm gonna gain immortality" "no your not" Tristan pulls out a sword and leaps at her she side steps him slices him with her claw Tristan lies on the floor unable to move Bella stands over him she opens her mouth and starts sucking out Tristan's soul but nothing happens Tristan stabs her and she sees Tristan's cold dead eyes as the blood pours out of her "your dead inside brother there's nothing left you've it's been to long your soul is gone I pity you brother for a life with no soul is like no life at all" she dies Tristan pushes her off stands up and walks out the building he walks into the sun set and he thinks she's right it's been to long.


    The end
     
  7. that was a cool ending!! -claps and grins- good job, brother hahaha
     
  8. I'm going to stop writing love into stories I don't know how to write it very well