We start watching the cabin in the woods and all of a sudden a thunder storm appears out of no where and we end up holding onto each other we looked out the windows and there was no lights on outside except from street-lamps an no one to be see. Not even any shadowy figures like birds. We finished watching the cabin in the woods but to calm us down we watched bedknobs and broomsticks. We have both watched this before. Many times. So we knew al the songs and started singing along with them. ALL OF A SUDDEN A DOOR BANGS WITH HEAVY KNOCKING. Oooh what happens next? CLIF-HANGER ALERT who was at the door ? why were they knocking heavily? why was this person out in a thunder and lightning storm? asking all these questions to yourself stay interested and you will see SORRY IT'S SOO SHORT and a cliff-hanger
Feedback: Grammar and spelling are everything. Even if a story is brilliant, nobody will know with these two things. You put periods at the ends of groups of words that didn't make a sentence. Ex: Everything felt 500ft bigger than. Bigger than what? Also, try to use better adjectives. I also don't understand what you meant in that sentence...
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"umm were you expecting anyone today ally?"I said worryingly. "Nope not that I know of." She told me with a smug face. we crept downstairs as we did I thought it could be my dad oh no or it could be "her". we were about to answer the door when we heard giggling and ally was smirking, I opened the door to see...... [][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][ sorry it's short again I am updating as soon as I can remember the name and looks......